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Remember Faye from DP? She's back, with a different party game.
This one ended up a lot longer than I expected it to. I'd been working on it, off and on, for about ten months and just got the muse to do the majority of it over the last week or so. I think I'm really happy with the way the ending turned out.
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Posted by ad12345 12 years ago Report
Very nice.
Posted by at_tltb 12 years ago Report
DP was my favorite story of yours. This one is almost good as it. Very nice.
Posted by Throku 12 years ago Report
Another amazing story! I must say that people should probably re-read DP first though, I didn't and it made me have the wrong image of Faye. (I did recall the name, but not the character., heck you go through 30-40 characters in this story.)
At the end there
I notice that you're often including a deeper emotional aspect to your stories. It does make for better writing as such, not sure I approve though. There were a few times in this one where that switch of focus sort of killed the action of it. Up to the fight it was all action and after that it seemed more all emotion and while the action was still being played out, it was so far in the background that no matter how fancy the special effects, you still couldn't see the movie. It could have to do with the narration, the point of view did mean the action ended up nigh impossible to observe and follow, while at the same time it was possibly necessary for the emotional aspect.
Posted by rugli 12 years ago Report
So your still alive.
Posted by Throku 12 years ago Report
Wait... what?
Posted by TwrchTwryth 12 years ago Report
I suppose it was a bit of a cut from sex/vore action to character issues. This was part of both taking so long to get the story put together and the last minute push to get it done and posted. But it was also what was necessary to concentrate on Layla & Sarai's relationship to give a reason why they would want to be digested together. When some body gets eaten, whether it's Cole or Natalie or Tara's boyfriend, it's supposed to be sexy because it's vore. When Layla and Sarai get eaten, it's supposed to both be sexy because it's vore but also be more affecting emotionally because we know more about these characters as people and understand some bit about what got them here.
I could have made the story solely about vore, sure. But I also wanted to do a little questioning of why the victims were willingly victims. To do that, I gave Layla and Sarai a back story. A more standard version of the story would probably use Faye as the focus, which is largely what I did in DP, but here I wanted to focus on the prey.
Posted by Dudeox05 12 years ago Report
In retrospect, I think this story gave me a deeper understanding of my paradoxical deathwish of love... Thanks for making a story I could connect with!
Keep up the amazing work. :)
Posted by TwrchTwryth 12 years ago Report
Thanks! I'm glad to hear that kind of response. I wanted to do a little examination of why willing prey could be willing and it sounds like that might have been a success.
Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report
Hmm, I find the aspect of 7 minutes of heaven in someones stomach quite interesting.
Posted by Throat_Wolf 12 years ago Report
It was well-written and titillating, as your stories usually are. All the same, I can't help finding it a little unrealistic the whole way the characters think that having seven minutes of ecstasy and then dying is TOTALLY AWESOME.
I know, I know. Complaining about vore, especially same-size vore, being "unrealistic" seems like the silliest thing ever. And in my own way I'm just as guilty of something similar in my neko/vore campus setting, creating a whole world and stacking the rules just so that vore can be non-lethal and yet inconvenient enough to still want to avoid. It's just a matter of personal taste in a way.
Still, I prefer something where both predators and prey have to deal with the fact that they're simultaneously drawn to and repelled by the act of vore...and then they all have to deal with the consequences over a longer term afterward, rather than being just, well, dead. It's more emotionally satisfying to me that way, I guess.
Posted by Beheader205 12 years ago Report
Very awesome! I love all of your stories! Even the ones with cock vore x3
Posted by DraconianTalon 12 years ago Report
Every time I read this I can't help but wonder how the party ended. Did people leave after Faye had her fill? Was there nobody left but Faye? And the real weird one. Did the rest of the Calzo family return and pay Faye for getting rid of their trouble making son and most of the towns delinquent teens?
Just some odd thought I had.
Posted by RubytheWitch20 11 years ago Report
lol i love to see a part 2
where we see what happens to her after her feasting
Posted by RubytheWitch20 11 years ago Report
i like to see a part 2
Posted by TwrchTwryth 11 years ago Report
Right now I don't have any plans for a sequel. There's a lot in my pile of half-done or just-started stories, but I wouldn't be surprised to see Faye pop up again in a different situation.
Posted by RubytheWitch20 11 years ago Report
oh i see T_T
Posted by Iwannabevored 11 years ago Report
Truly a work of art:)