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In which witch-hunters make a surprise appearance. Well, it's not terribly surprise now that I've told you, but it happens dead quickly. I don't think I've ruined it.
This description is miles too. It's mainly because I want to share my thoughts on this piece. If you don't care about that load of old tosh, the only other thing of concern is the potentially spoilerish bit at the end.
This is roughly 2/3 the length of Part I, although much fewer significant events take place. Not to say that it's insignificant; major things happen, but I think where the first part gave the impression great progress was being made towards the end this part gives more of a vibe that there's a lot more to come. When I first writ the first part, I expected that by the time I had made this much progress the story would be finished or near-finished, but I've since changed my mind. So I apologize to my watchers who prefer my usual stuff, because you won't be seeing much of it for a while.
Special thanks to Assassinmaster62 and Speed284504 who commented on the last installment. Have I mentioned that I love comments lately? In case I haven't, I love comments.
I've feebly tried for maybe one character description, but for the most part things are still left up to imagination. This is one of my weak points, so I try not to let it show by avoiding it entirely, but I suppose it's only a matter of time before its absence becomes more conspicuous than its ham-handed inclusion.
I also felt as though Red had made an unbelievable turnaround as far as character went (flirty, easygoing, and friendly rather than spiteful and hostile), so I rewrote my original ending to sort of go back to her roots a little bit. Let me know what you think.
Mild Spoilers Below (not particularly more than the tags):
I've tagged this non-vore although something that could pretty convincingly be argued is vore does occur. In my mind, this vore-like thing wasn't properly consummated, so I don't count it although I'm sure others would. Like I've written before, vore is not the spotlight of this presentation, but it comes so naturally to wolfweres that it must make some semblance of being in attendance.
I think I was too subtle, so I'll also frankly state that Uriel is from the east. In case anyone's wondering, the main hints were that he refers to an archbishop as a metropolitan and his adopted name (which tends not to appear as often if at all in western angelology).
Hope you enjoy.
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Posted by wolfstar 11 years ago Report
Must you try to end it so soon?
Posted by I_Cant_Write 11 years ago Report
I'm sorry that I didn't phrase things as clearly as I might have done (not sure where you got confused because there's at least three distinct places where I was obtuse). I'm not trying to end it soon; I reckon it's got quite a bit still in it. At the barest of minimums, I would suppose two more installments of comparable length to the ones already presented if I decided to just stop presenting stuff right now and work on resolving the whole plot.
Posted by wolfstar 11 years ago Report
Sorry I had misread the description. I had seen the 2/3 but had somehow passed the next 5 words. I'll make sure to read more thoroughly before making a comment if there is a next time ill comment.
Posted by I_Cant_Write 11 years ago Report
I appreciate the sentiment regardless.
Posted by Speed284504 11 years ago Report
It seemed a little shorter than the last one, but otherwise it's a great addition to the series. Red is now more likable, and the plot is flowing and developing smoothly. I can't post my stuff right now, but when I get to a computer and do some editing, I might pm you later with what I have and you can let me know what you think. But regardless, it's a great read, and I can't wait to see more!
Posted by I_Cant_Write 11 years ago Report
Thank you for the kind words. I'll repay them with a torrent of explanation that is of little interest.
The first one was a bit exceptional in terms of length because I hadn't yet had delusions of grandeur and decided to make this quite so protracted; as it was originally going to be the alpha and omega (so to speak) it needed to be sufficiently long as to stand alone. I expect there will be several more episodes to come, however, so I no longer feel the pressure to make each one quite that lengthy. In addition, I wanted to end on a suitably dramatic moment and couldn't think of enough reasonable filler to pad the length at the time of writing (you see, I had atypically foreordained this bit of railroading).
Please do send me a PM if you get the chance. My curiosity has been piqued. Cheers!