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In a dark world divided by those at the top of the food chain and those at the bottom, a young woman struggles to look after her family and keep them out of harm's way.
A short story done for an anonymous commission. Hope you all enjoy it!
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Posted by Mestrus 10 years ago Report
YES!!!
Posted by Ridwanwolf 10 years ago Report
This story is really sad
Posted by dagar 10 years ago Report
I have to say a few things.
A) I absolutely love the setting. The entire setting seemed right out of my fantasies.
B) You're quite talented at writing! I thoroughly enjoyed reading each bit of this as it went, rather than skipping about for the next "good bit"
C) This is a story that reminds me of depressed cake, covered in depressing icing, and littered with suicidal sprinkles. To that end, yes, you did make me cry, and for that, I stab at thee later. XD
Overall, very well done! Even if your "Dark world" warning didn't quite get me ready for it.
Posted by Wierdost 10 years ago Report
Glad to hear you enjoyed it, hope it didn't depress you too much!
Posted by Mechdragon1k 8 years ago Report
I love these settings too
Posted by Ckb123 10 years ago Report
One of the best stories I've ever read on this site :) you should consider writing more of them with this setting :)
Posted by Wierdost 10 years ago Report
Thank you very much and I may just have to consider it.
Posted by Zelda 10 years ago Report
Simply glorious, not much more I can say. Just please keep giving us great stories.
Posted by VixieMoondew 10 years ago Report
I agree that this is a very good story. After the second devouring, it's pretty clear that everyone else is soon to follow. :P Admittedly the voring sometimes feels random (particularly the harpies), but the rest tends to be nicely foreshadowed.
Posted by Thanatos2k 10 years ago Report
You'd think they would carry around some kind of weapon.
Posted by JTrucken 10 years ago Report
Great story! Sad, but with good vore. Kind of wish that some of the other character's digestion were described, such as the second baroness or Kassandra's, but that's just my personal opinion.
Posted by Skeiron 10 years ago Report
Dark world indeed O_O
This is one of the few vore stories that really got to me emotionally. I really wanted to see Isolda and Hannah make it out. To me, that is the sign of a good writer :)
I would love to read more. Keep up the good work!
Posted by Wierdost 10 years ago Report
Thank you, glad I had such a strong effect on you with the story :)
Posted by nipnaki 10 years ago Report
Being a peasant sucks in every universe. I think what makes this story more inflammatory is that a) everyone who eats Isolda's loved ones is super vindictive and b) they get away with it. Getting amused/aroused (amoused?) by torturing serfs is pretty reprehensible(see: Gunnm), and the part that's tragic is that the crapsack world doesn't punish them. The cruel lord gets his comeuppance, then balance is restored. You might say that as we consume this story, we find it bitter and unsettling, ultimately leaving us feeling glutted with negative feelings.
Posted by Wierdost 10 years ago Report
Cheers for the insightful comment! :) Ultimately I was intentionally making a rather dark and twisted story, I just hope it wasn't so much so as to deprive it of any enjoyment.
Posted by Aickavon12 10 years ago Report
was waiting for the main character to get some revenge eventually, it didn ot happen. Good story, though it saddened me greatly.
Posted by hero097 10 years ago Report
wow, um. I don't know if I should say get the swords or scythes for this one
Posted by Mechdragon1k 7 years ago Report
This is a awesome setting through one I kind of want to nuke, distopia are like that.