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So... finally, part 4.
Sorry about the delay - my smut writing flow comes and goes sometimes.
Also sorry that this scene doesn't have as much plot as I intended to put in it - I'll just work that into the next part. I figured you guys would want something sooner than later, and there's not much room for plot after a sex scene, in my opinion.
Also also sorry for using the word "twain." It... it just kind of happened.
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Posted by glargicus 10 years ago Report
Great job, I'm eagerly awaiting the next part! The force-feeding/fattening up of August doesn't really do anything for me personally, but that's just a matter of taste. I particularly like the insinuation when she tells him he's a human sacrifice. It suggests to me that she's gloating about taking control of him, making him sacrifice his life in a more metaphysical way, in that he's giving up university etc. in order to serve her.
Posted by Argh 10 years ago Report
God, the chapters just keep getting hotter and better. You've paced it so well; each interaction is just so agonizingly sexy. And you keep the reader on edge and guessing, constantly, which is outstanding. Any moment could be when she feasts on August—just rolls over and plants a kiss on him that grows wider and wider and doesn't stop until he's a bulge in her belly—or you could just as convincingly have the next chapter months in the future, when she's successfully fattened him up and completely dominated his life. Or one of a thousand other variations! That's, I think, what makes this so hot and fun: the inevitability, but the sly, flirty variations and possibilities, like a very fat cat playing with a (not quite yet fat) mouse. Most vore stories feel preordained, just filler to get to the end, but this feels like a playful piece of living literature. I obviously want more, but no matter how long it takes for you to get the next chapter, or how many chapters it takes for you to tell the story you want, just keep doing it exactly how you're doing it, because it is awesome.