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The Twi'lek Bounty Hunter (I) By GrinningCheshire -- Report

Written for http://aryion.com/g4/user/ILLEGAL%20ALIEN%2093

I'm not the biggest fan of non-fatal oral vore, but hey, I think this could work!

Based on this: http://aryion.com/g4/view/297382

Part 1 of 3

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Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 9 years ago Report

Very nice but I noticed a few errors, overall good work though

GrinningCheshire

Posted by GrinningCheshire 9 years ago Report

Thanks! And yeah, it's not perfect. I've been distracted with finals so I did not have as much clean-up time writing this as I had hoped.

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 9 years ago Report

College or high school?

GrinningCheshire

Posted by GrinningCheshire 9 years ago Report

College. Don't worry, I'm not breaking any laws here.

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 9 years ago Report

Neither am I... Just curious are they harder than high school?

GrinningCheshire

Posted by GrinningCheshire 9 years ago Report

Yes... They are... And I suffer from panic attacks... This week has not been fun.

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 9 years ago Report

Well that's going to be a terror for my future... Please accept my condolences for your sanity and attitude because I believe it will rapidly get worse before it gets better (with the stress building up before the grand decision of passing or failing, one of my classmates nearly attacked someone after not getting what she wanted on her transcript ) good luck

DresdenQ

Posted by DresdenQ 9 years ago Report

excellent, really adds to the picture, excellent prose

GrinningCheshire

Posted by GrinningCheshire 9 years ago Report

Thanks! It was the first time someone asked me to write something for them, so I was hoping it turned out all right.

ILLEGAL ALIEN 93

Posted by ILLEGAL ALIEN 93 9 years ago Report

Nice work buddy this was really good the only problem that I had with the story is that you accidently say that Syd had brown skin but that is only a minor error and also is there a chance that this series IL take a femslash turn later on ?

GrinningCheshire

Posted by GrinningCheshire 9 years ago Report

Oh, I did? Sorry.

Probably will be. At the very least it will be implied.

ILLEGAL ALIEN 93

Posted by ILLEGAL ALIEN 93 9 years ago Report

Hie buddy when can you post part 2 of the story ? because I am weary exited to read it

ILLEGAL ALIEN 93

Posted by ILLEGAL ALIEN 93 9 years ago Report

Hie buddy I have not heard from you in a while and I was wondering about how you were doing and when you cod start working on chapter 2 for this story ?

mrcool

Posted by mrcool 9 years ago Report

more of this please!

BatfinK16

Posted by BatfinK16 8 years ago Report

Will chapter 2 ever be a thing?

Karsap

Posted by Karsap 5 years ago Report

So where's the rest?