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Here is the sequel to "Bet Among Friends"!
Dane is enjoying himself a week after the incident with his son. Could a friend of Jakes uncover what exactly happened on that fateful night?
Edit: All prey mentioned in the story are of age. It's explained in " Bet Among Friends" that both Jack and Allen are in their early 20s, but it isn't explicit in this sequel. Sorry about that.
I experimented a bit with the idea of permanence of prey as fat on the pred in the first part of this story, and may expand that into it's own story later on.
Enjoy and let me know what you think!
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Posted by copb.phoenix 8 years ago Report
Your sense of time comes and goes, at time implying it's been a week and at times implying it's been a night. That's the only thing I'd offer as a criticism of the story.
Posted by GalionFiremage 8 years ago Report
Gotcha, I thought I cleaned up but it looks like I missed some parts. I tend to write stores in parts, and usually out of order from the actual chronological order within the story. When I go to splice all the parts together sometimes I simply forget the time frame between the splices.
I'll have to take better care of keeping time consistent. Thanks for the critique!
Posted by deletef093nb49d 8 years ago Report
<3
I cant think of anything to say other than I LOVED it. I'm not a huge fan of scat, so I kinda skipped that part, but read and loved everything else!
hope this series continues!
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Posted by deletef093nb49d 8 years ago Report
Also, wanted to point out, one of my favorite parts of vore is when the pred is so much naturally larger than the prey, they show no sign of having eaten when the prey is in them. Fat preds like Dane are great for things like public vore. Eating someone in public and getting away with it, because no one can see it.
Even more so if its underage prey, like a pred noming some kids in a park, or a pred following a kid into the restroom at a fast food place, only to be the only one seen leaving.
Posted by timdavis 7 years ago Report
Constantly revisiting this story.
Posted by GalionFiremage 7 years ago Report
Excellent! If I may ask, what keeps drawing you back to the story? I can try to incorporate more of those themes in future stories.
Posted by timdavis 7 years ago Report
I love the basic specs--M/M, human/human, same size, digestion and disposal. I also love the dominant pred, the humiliation/objectification, and the submissive prey. One thing I especially like is that the prey realizes it's not as fun as he thought it would be, and wants out (presumably). I love when the prey is unwilling, semi-willing, or changes their mind.
Posted by CruorAmbrosia 4 years ago Report
This series is just so amazing. I absolutely love it all! You're such an awesome writer. I would have loved to be Dane's kid or neighbor!
Dane is definitely one of my most favorite kind of preds. I can;t help but read these stories over and over! I can't get enough of them. <3