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part 6, sorry I'm a day late, I was off to family. But I know avezola didn't let you wait too much^^
enjoy your reading =3
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“Mfh… That was good…” The black dragon groaned, panting with satisfaction.
Belly on the ground, crying all the tears her body contained, Astora didn’t dare a move. She felt so hurt… and not only physically. She could still feel him deep inside her, his horrible warmth polluting her poor insides… How dirty she felt…
With a big, delighted moan that sounded like a horrible sound of death to her, the male slowly pulled out. She kept sobbing all along, and a little cry of pain escaped her maw when she felt her intimacy close after him.
The male came closer to her head, his steps resonating awfully in her mind.
“You’re really comfortable in there, sweetie…” He whispered nastily to her. “But you didn’t put much effort, that’s a shame…”
It wasn’t enough to rape her, but he just had to insult her too?! What a horrible dragon! She wished so hard she could rip his throat!
“And all these whining… Seriously, you almost spoilt it…”
“I will rip your male hood off! This way I could spoil it for good!” She screamed, out of control.
Her raging voice echoed in the cave, a heavy silence taking place as the threat slowly faded. She had put so much energy in her protest that she panted, hardly recovering her breath. The way this dragon had treated her had been exhausting… physically and mentally…
She knew that scream was a mistake… She could have gotten away without it… If she had kept calm for just a few more minutes, she could have been left alone, to recover and starting to get over this nightmarish experience…
But now it was over. In the silence of the black dragon, she could hear a sentence to death… He would surely not let her get away with this… He was about to punish her… even stronger than any of the previous times… and in her state, she wasn’t sure she could survive it…
“You think you’re going to do what?” The male asked in a cold calm.
She didn’t answer. Whatever she could tell, that would only worsen things… She was done anyway… And she didn’t care anymore… She just wanted to get this over with for good…
A pair of powerful paws seized her by the shoulders, but her head didn’t have enough strength to stay in place… It only hung, attached to her body with a weak and loosened neck. But the male didn’t seem to care about it… He was dragging her on the ground… Where was he bringing her?
She opened her eyes to see the forest, a few meters below…
The cliff…
She remembered she had always loved her cozy cave for the cliff that came with it. There she could have an incomparable view on the forest and the horizon… But today… She had the feeling she was about to hate that cliff…
“I do not tolerate this kind of threat!” The dragon growled.
Her body couldn’t fight anymore… She only vaguely felt movements shifting her body… and then…
The fall…
It was almost pleasant to feel… She was too exhausted to feel fear anymore… The wind caressed her body, appeasing a bit the pain of her wounds. She felt so light… A bit like when she flew. But inevitably, an unbearable, overtaking pain electrocuted her whole body.
The ground… so hard… so painful… She wouldn’t have taken it this hard in another day, but this time it was simply too much for her poor body. Unable to move, she stayed breathing slowly, her empty stared turned to the trees…
Lovely trees… beautiful trees… She had never been so appeased by trees before. Focusing on them released her from a bit of her pain. Yes… She would stay there to recover… Not like she could do more, anyway…
Oh?
Was there something behind the trees? Was there some animal who had heard her fall? No… Not some animal… No regular animal had its skin covered with green scales… These were dragons… small dragons…
The hunters…
No, Anything but them… After all she had endured, she could have finally seen the light at the end of the tunnel… And there they were… They seemed so happy… Of course, silly! They had gotten their paws on a bigger dragon; quite a catch for them!
Their squeaks made her nauseous… The emotions were too much… She felt dizzy… Her whole mind and body were shutting down, probably their way to say that had enough. She let her eyelids close by themselves…
And welcomed the darkness that surrounded her.
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Posted by ILoveDragons 9 years ago Report
So, is there any happiness to this story or is it all death and rape?
Posted by learner 9 years ago Report
be patient, I don't like writing such scene, but in a story all happens for a reason.
Posted by ILoveDragons 9 years ago Report
Just curious, as six "chapters" in and we've seen one gruesome death and a rape scene plus attempted murder. I know this is a fetish site, but isn't there a limit to how much one can destroy something before the perverts wake up? (I.e digestion, an absolutely horrid thing, and anyone who wishes to do something like that to another being deserves to be executed)
Posted by learner 9 years ago Report
I'm totally not into these, but I did this story for avezola and followed his requests. As for digestion, if you don't like it i suggest you stop reading because there will be more. If you knew how horrible it was for me to write about rape, violence and digestion,, I think you wouldn't worry so much^^
And finally, I'd say it's only a story... If everyone who wrote about horrible scenes was a secret psychopath, I would sincerely be paranoid XD
Posted by Avezola 9 years ago Report
the intention behind this was to build up the hate against this cruel dragon AND i wanted a different story for once! no " we are all save and sound cause schlirk is here to devour all that is evil oh look a rainbow" im a huge fan of dystopian stories and i pleged learner to write it it took him MUCH effort and im so proud of him he did it so well that you already hate this part... se it is okay to be upset but it is for the story... i abosultey hate when a main character is in danger and his or her strong friend bursts out a bush or something for revenge although he clearly couldnt know whats going on, so called "deus ex machina" ( roughly transtlated by "Atificial god" it is lame to build up a story based on such moments.... sry but if you came to simply brainless vore and stuff this might not be the right story.... i dont mean to offend you in anyway i just explained myself
have a nice day sir
Posted by ILoveDragons 9 years ago Report
I'm going to divide this into two sections)
Learner: Perhaps your writing is different from my own, but wouldn't you agree it is more of a passion and an art than a chore? Writing does take considerable effort, Avezola is absolutely correct about that even when it does not contain such brutality. If you're not "into this" and believe it is horrible to write then why create it? You prefer the far less lethal sides to these things. As for more digestion to this story? I'm not surprised, I'm confident I know how the rest of this finishes.
Avezola: Building up an antagonist I understand, this isn't the first rape scene I've read. Stephen King writes rape scenes, murders and attempted murders in many of his stories, death is assured with his work. Perhaps I'm mistaken but it is rare for a story to be so poorly written (Not this one, I mean in general) that anyone just pops out of a bush. Usually it is a case of previous knowledge of their friend being in trouble or them stumbling onto the situation, and like you said, unaware of what is going on. I'm not here for brainless vore, or even vore in general. I'm here for a story, well written and thought out which on a site like this, is rare. No offense intended, but in a vore story trying to stand apart from others is difficult at the best of times. You don't exactly have a lot room to make a new path when all of them lead to a stomach. I've read through "Stories" of vore for two years(Mostly on DA), and all follow similar patterns.
Posted by ILoveDragons 9 years ago Report
Don't get me wrong, I tentatively like this story. You've done well enough to build up the antagonist and the female Dragoness. But the ending is still the same. "Schlirk" has already smelled blood of his "friend" which by definition could make him, your Deus Ex Machina (The definition of which: an unexpected power or event saving a seemingly hopeless situation, especially as a contrived plot device in a play or novel) and is giving chase. I'll be damned if he does anything BUT eat this other Dragon or the smaller Dragons. If he doesn't actually use his stomach (again) that'd be the most amazing thing to one of these stories I've read.
Posted by Avezola 9 years ago Report
im sry for letting learner writing a part he is not "into"
this is my fault ... i asked him to cause im not a good writer. i know how i want my story to affect and what i want to tell. we then made comprimises... you will notice soon enough.
and well yes everything in a damn vore story somehow leads into a stomach or other suitable organ ^^"
its no secret nor in this story. i ve read many "lame" or to obvious stories it always ruined my fun of reading when i came across said events since you already know what deus ex machina means excuse my poor explanation. it is not the plot we wanted to show,
its about characters and feelings (ALTHOUGH you might be surprised then whats gonna happen...). and i dont mean romantic feelings. schlirk is intented as pure gluttonous creature his personality is only formed about his actions, since he got only one inner sight part ( cause learner couldt do it any other way ^^" no offense) astora is the only one with inner sight but also not the main character. everything happens for a cetain reason and im explaining this cause its not the ending we are aiming for. (the ending indeed is quite (in parts ) predictable. it is quite a personal piece which we decided to share with you all here. thats the reason it includes digestion and focusses on swallowing prey... etc i wanted to point out the incredible greedyness of schlirk. since we are not perfect or even close to popular authors like stephen king or else you shouldnt compare us to them or even expect something else than vore >_>
Posted by ILoveDragons 9 years ago Report
Schlirk is an anti-hero at best here. My favorite prediction is where the greedy "Dragon" kills the rapist and saves Astora (if she is still alive, which is my assumption) and she is allowed to continue her life. Now, again with vore stories, there are two possible paths here. One, he flat out kills her. The second she survives. My sincerest hope is that she does live, but I find that extremely unlikely. It was noted by Astora, she was fighting to keep her mind under control but the greedy "Dragon" also enjoyed her taste as stated at the end of the last chapter. While you say Astora isn't the main character, that's who immediately comes to mind for as who is the protagonist. If he does kill her, I won't be surprised but I'll be disappointed Though, that's something I've come to expect when dealing with this website. I sincerely hope that this story has a good ending. Which sets it apart from other stories here on Eka.
Posted by Avezola 9 years ago Report
i wont spoil you but so far none of your guessings are right at least not completly right. what ending it has is of your choice so u need to decide in the end ... a little hint i can give: think about the title
Posted by ILoveDragons 9 years ago Report
You are leaving it opened ended. No offense, but that doesn't set this story apart from others here.
Posted by Avezola 9 years ago Report
im not leaving an open end i just say you have to decide what kind of end it is for you
Posted by divineBeast 9 years ago Report
i for one am very interested in this story. not because of all the horrible stuff going on but because its like an actual story with layers. kudos to learner for having the courage to write rape. its not fun to write but its one of the ways to show how bad the villain is and what hes capable of.
Posted by learner 9 years ago Report
thank you for your encouragements, it was indeed really hard to write such a scene, when at first I just wanted schlirk to appear before it happens. Maybe I'm too soft hearted, but I usually skip violent/nasty stuff when I read, so writing them... ^^;
Posted by Donovan8 9 years ago Report
interesting change of pace, having tragedy happen without being prevented isn't normaly like you, but i dont mind it. i may dislike digestion and rape but im enjoying the story for what it is, a story. If i only wanted what i like i would imagine the story myself, but i read other peoples works to enjoy somthing new and exotic. ignore what someone might be saying about this series, worry about that after its done. your not suppose to give a final criticism about something untill its declared finished anyway. Im enjoying this for now though i am still waiting with baited breath for other series from you that are currently ongoing.
Posted by learner 9 years ago Report
thanks for your encouragements =3 it's not easy to write out of comfort zone, especially since the themes you mentioned aren't my cup of tea either. I hope you'll like the rest of it^^