Posted by Monopolus 9 years ago Report

Best opening line of any story. Hands down.

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Haha! That was quick! :D

Posted by Plasmids 9 years ago Report

Ok, after reading this story I have to be honest and say that I noticed right away the same pattern that you did with the last story. And I have to admit that I did not like this story. I hope that my comments will not offend you and that you should know that I’m not trying to be mean or insult you in anyway. I really love your willing vore stories, how you describe vore in great detail, and also your transform vore. You are one of my favorite writers when it comes to vore and I really love re-reading your stories. And I also understand that this is your story and you can write however you see fit and no comment from me is every going to change that. I just want you to know that. That being said, this story series is really starting to get stupid. But before the bad, let me tell what I did enjoy in the story.

I loved how you did this whole story based on the POV of the man that was eaten by Annie and Laura. I thought that you did incredible job describing his feelings of being eaten, what it was like to be swallowed, digested and pooped out by these pretty girls (mostly from Annie’s perspective) and also how he became apart of her. I have also wished that if I was ever eaten by a pretty woman that I would be inside of her and living with her. Kind of like the story that you did when Franck was turned into a strawberry and eaten by his best friend or girlfriend. You did excellent job in that I must say!! I also like the tension and the drama of when Anna was questioned by the officer and then questioning Emily. But here is where you lost me and where the bad of the story is. Now, I’m not sure what you are trying to explain to your audience about Annie’s character. But from I've read in there I’ve come to only two conclusions about her mental status. Either she has had some bad childhood memories of the past where she sees this person that she loves as some sort of god or important person in her life and even though she knows in her mind that he/she has do some horrible thing her heart just can’t believe it. Kind of like Star Wars episode three where Padme wouldn't believe Obi-wan when he told her that her husband killed younglings in cold blood and the literal went to him to find out if it was true… even though she knew in her mind it was true. Or she is the most dumbest, most gullible, most naive person that I have ever read about in my life.

She knows that Emily has this power to turn people in food. She also got questioned by an officer of the law about a missing person and that Emily was the last person that ever saw him and yet she still believes all of the garbage that Emily is feeding her. Either you are trying to make her a dumb shit or you have real talent for destroying all the tension and drama that was in this story based on that one moment. I have been on the edge seat more, when I’ve watched law and order then reading this story. I know that you like happy endings, but seriously this character of Annie is really stupid. She can’t read between the lines, even when they are right in her face. And that made me do a double face palm after reading that.

Now again, I hope that I have not offended you or hurt your feelings. That is not intention. I truly love your stories and I love reading them over and over again. But this stories series is really starting to get dull and stupid in my opinion. I’m sorry to say that. I truly hope that I have not hurt your feelings or anything like that. And if i have I apologize for that. These are just my opinions and nothing more.

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Hm. Well it's not exactly phrased in the friendliest way. As the previous story suggests, Annie starts out very much *wanting* to believe Emily. So no, she's not an idiot; but self-persuasion and wishful thinking can be quite powerful. If she believes Emily, then she has the comfort and happiness of their continued relationship. If she doesn't, then… things would become *very* uncertain. Where would she go from there?

In any case, this probably wraps up Emily and Annie's story arc. I have no further plans for them at present. Emily has had a narrow call, a bit of a fright, and is likely to stop transforming people, at least for the foreseeable future. This story was also intended to show that she's settled happily enough with Annie, rather than continue to pine after Laura - even though there were hints that she's still very much attracted to Laura too. Whatever you might think about Annie, Emily isn't stupid, and she does have a capacity for self-control when she realises danger might be closing in.

Posted by Plasmids 9 years ago Report

I'll admit that my first comment to you did have some unfriendly moments in some of the sentences, but I say again that I did not mean them to be mean or insulting at all to you. I'm blatantly honest when it comes to commenting on stories or artwork. I apologize again if anything that I said offended you or hurt you in anyway. With that being said once again, I going to try and keep this next comment more civil then the last one was, but there may be some things in here that you may think are unfriendly. But just know that I’m not being mean or insulting, just being honest on what I thought about after reading the story and your last story

I really did like your quick description of your character Annie and do I agree with you when you say that Annie has wishful thinking when it comes to trying to think Emily has changed her ways or even thinking her attempts at changing her are working. And also that the wishful thinking in real relationships can blind people from the truth of the matter. However, that can only last so long before logic breaks in and shines the brilliant light of truth on you. So, I will still stand by my conclusion on how I described her in my last comment, as being really naive, gullible and not thinking things out in a very methodical way. Basically, you have just told me that she really wanted to believe Emily and now she is practically blinded by love to not even remember or even look at all the evidence that she has found out or even experienced while being around her. After re-reading your story again and your last one, I noticed some things in there that really stood out to me and made me think about why has she not looked back on these things and thought, “Huh, you know, maybe she is lying to me.” I’ll briefly go over the points that I thought explained why she is naive and not thinking things through.

The first thing I noticed was when Annie asked Emily if she has ever killed someone before or done something horrible to anyone in a joking manner and right away she said no to her. That right away should have been a dead giveaway later on when she revealed her true colors. She is a pathologic liar! And if she lied about something like that, what else has she lied about or is capable of lying about? But no, she total forgets that part and just moves on with her relationship with Emily like nothing happened. The next thing was Emily reveal to Annie that she loved Laura, again another give away. She has done this to someone that she loves and she sees nothing wrong in that. Shouldn’t Annie have, after learning about her true nature, that maybe she may try this on her if they ever got too close or even to the point of loving each other? I mean if she does it with someone she loves and to her friends, she can’t be trusted to not do it with Annie too and she should have thought about that. The third part, she had experienced life as a banana for a few hours. She had the sense of fear, helplessness, confusion, dread, and many other panicking emotions that you can think about and yet she seems too not to remember or even have nightmares of the effect Emily did on her. Which in turn would cause her to be paranoid at the very thought of eating with Emily, wondering if she has turned someone into food in her own kitchen, wondering if Emily is giving her a person turned food to her during dinner, or wondering if Emily making dinner is excuse for her to turn more people into food to serve to Annie or her guests. In another words, she should have a “spidey-sense” which is a voice in the back of her mind telling her things like, she may be lying to you, that carrot may have been a person, or why is she giving me that pickle or for that matter why is she offering to cook dinner. You know, that sense we have in our minds, the flight or fight instinct that goes off when we feel some thing is wrong or something is off with that person. But no, she has none of those things on her mind after being turn back into human form, nor does she even have those feelings until someone flat out tells her. Like the police officer for example. You would think that after being in traumatic experience that she would have a sense of worry and paranoia surrounding her.

And the last thing is probably the most important red flag of them all, how Emily reacts to the fact that she turns people into food and watches people eat them. She loves it, plan and simple. She was smiling about it, like it was a fond memory to her. She has lost track of how many people she has done this to, she admits that she is a monster or a psycho (Oh wait, she thinks it’s a negative word my mistake. Spoken like a true looney bird), she tells her that it’s a sexual fetish to her, she enjoys the fact that she loves knowing that Laura is innocent about the whole thing, and she goes on about it more and more and how much she enjoys it. What person in there right mind would want to be friends or even a relationship with this nut ball after discovering the truth?! It’s like saying that a young hannibal lecter is in a relationship with a young woman who knows he eats people and yet she figures that he has stopped doing that, when in fact he continues to and even puts human cooked parts on her plate with out her knowing it and enjoying it. Be honest, would you ever in your life want to date someone like this after she lied to you several times, turned you into a banana, almost had your cousin eat you, then turned you back to normal and then claimed she would stop doing this? I know that I would never in my lifetime would ever date her, after being turned back I’d get the heck out of there and move someplace where no one can find me.

The point that I am trying to make here is that Annie is either blinded by what you call, self-peruasion and wishful thinking that really is so powerful that it overcomes all the truths that she has been bestowed upon. Or she just can’t read between the lines and see that the person she is dating is nothing but a nut that belongs either in the nut house or in hell itself. She is wearing the horse blinders throughout this entire relationship and is not even going to methodically think about all the things that she has witnessed and come to the conclusion that no matter what she does to Emily. She will never, ever change her ways. Annie should know that the first rule of an addict is when they become addicted to something, it is almost impossible for them to get rid of that addiction.

And when you mentioned that Emily is not stupid, I never once mentioned in my comment that she was stupid. In fact, comparing Annie to Emily she is about twenty times smarter then Annie is and in fact she doesn’t have to try to convince her that she has not done anything to that missing person. All she has to do is pretty much shed some tears, put on whimpering voice, tell her she has not done anything wrong and beg her to not leave her and say that has promised to never do this again. And right away, Annie believes her. I mean, all that is missing is for Emily to say, “Would you kindly drop the subject,” and she probably would (Bioshock reference). I'm just saying, that when all the facts are present to Annie she doesn’t utilize or remember them at all when the time is ripe for them to be used. I also understand that Emily would have some self-control on her addiction, after all how else would she get with it for so long without having some control. But again, Annie knows her secret and was told be the officer about a missing person that Emily was the only person to have seen him last. That should have raised some alarm bells in her head, but instead she stands around listening to all the lies that Emily is feeding her, like a deer in the headlights. And all the lies just go over her head. She is obviously not the brightest bulb in the socket. I agree with deej1011, when he said that Annie should have called her out on that fact that she was lying and then leave in a huff. Which would have made Emily think long and hard about how much she loves Annie and after few days of thinking she realizes that she does indeed love her. Then it could’ve ended on a cliff hanger where she is calling Annie to talk with her. Maybe fix their relationship or mess it up more? And she could even have a semi-honest statement that she would not turn people into food, so that Annie can trust her more and then she can use her fetish powers again in the future. Something that, but as I said before, no rational, methodical or even free-thinking person would ever do or even fall for. Emily should have been a better liar, but sadly you can see her lies from a mile off… especially when you know her true self.

Again this is just my opinion and nothing more. I say again that I don’t mean to be mean or insulting, but I’m just being honest about what I read about and that is it. Nothing more.

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

That's okay; thank you for taking the time to write such a detailed comment. It's a fair point. You're quite right that Annie is not being rational or methodical. But then, many people aren't. It's a common misconception that we're, first and foremost, rational beings. It seems to me that people act on the basis of feelings, wishful thinking and self-persuasion rather more often than on the basis of clinical reasoned detachment.

Annie is emotionally drawn to Emily. She has persuaded herself that Emily is a troubled soul who can be "healed" or helped with a bit of steady love and attention, which she's happy to provide. It's a flattering self-image. To some extent, she's telling herself "As long as I show her I love her and trust her, as long as I make her happy and give her something to live for, she's not going to do that any more". It's not reasonable, but it's pretty powerful self-persuasion. And Emily knows what to do to keep Annie persuaded, including just by turning on the waterworks and looking hurt and appealing tearfully to her trust.

Of course, we don't actually see the full workings of Annie's mind here, since the story is told entirely from the perspective of the transformed person she unknowingly ate. There may be occasional niggling doubts or alarm bells, which she silences by telling herself she should be ashamed of not fully trusting Emily. That shame would make her want to make an even greater effort to trust her completely.

Posted by deej1011 9 years ago Report

While i liked the story overall, I gotta agree with Plasmids that it's a bit of a stretch that Annie just up and bought it when it was glaringly obvious Emily was lying.
Maybe it's the part of me that isn't keen on the whole "they were absorbed and are stuck consciously aware forever" thing (in vore and TF scenarios, it's always been a bit too fucked up for my tastes), but personally I think I'd have liked it more if either she called Emily out on it and had it reversed (if doable) or had him be made no longer aware, or at least have it so he'd grow less aware over time...

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Well, if it's a matter of different personal preferences and tastes, there's not much to be said. I *do* (obviously) like the idea of the prey becoming a conscious part of the girl who ate him.

Posted by Bifurcation 9 years ago Report

I always appreciate these Emily stories. The descriptions match how I visulize digestion and I think the style is unique among the wider internet.

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Thanks! I don't think I've ever seen stories done quite this way, indeed. I'm glad I'm not alone in enjoying this type of scenario! :)

Posted by rlynx 9 years ago Report

I adore the notion of vore with a deathless, painless - or even pleasurable - digestion that ends with absorption, like you describe so well. I have to admit, however, that I found this tale disturbing, even horrific, because the predators don't know. It seems condemn the prey to a lonely existence, stripping the intimacy of absorption away. I wonder if you've considered a tale involving this sort of effect, done by someone more hands-on and less voyueristic than Emily? Or an effect that merely shrinks, to the same end.

That would open up all sorts of possibilities for post-absorption teasing...or even teasing of a more humiliating sort; I'd have loved to hear what Sandra would have said to Chelsea, as it came time for her favorite part of vore, knowing the former girl was fully aware of it all ;>

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Hmm; predator awareness and friendliness could be interesting, I agree. Particularly if she knows what part of her own body her food has become a part of.

Posted by 00000 9 years ago Report

I for one, will miss this story arc. I enjoy your works and the themes associated with them. Sorry to see the criticisms leveled here in the comments. Your human (non-felayra) stories are my top reads in this site, along with a very select few other authors. I enjoy the devious, bordering on evil delight of the anti-protagonists. Your incorporation of sexual themes with doomed prey helplessly enduring the throes of passion inside a female pred, ultimately ending in its eventual disposal is my main draw to this genre in general. The Chicago series is among my top for exactly that reason. I always try to comment on your submissions to encourage that theme. I for one, say keep up the excellent work.

Posted by 00000 9 years ago Report

Also, any more Cherry or Mona-esque works bouncing around in your mind? I think they should be brought to fruition!! ;)

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Thank you very much! We do seem to enjoy similar themes. There's something about Emily watching the transformed person as he disappears into her friend's mouth, and the transformee realising that she's watching. That she's enjoying seeing him get eaten…

No, I've got no specific ideas for the IVC characters at present, unfortunately. But we'll no doubt see them again - feeling bloated and struggling to digest, with their stuffed tummies full of people. :p

Posted by Indighost 9 years ago Report

I loved it! Much more descriptive than most of your stuff. Very voyeuristic in the best way! I love the way you describe all the wonderful sounds, feelings, sensations.

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Thanks! I wanted readers to be drawn into the experience. :)

Posted by Jamie263 9 years ago Report

That was brilliant. What an interesting concept, having his consciousness inside two different girls. I've thought about scenarios like this before. Being transformed into food while retaining consciousness all the way.

My favourite aspect was the becoming a part of both of them at he end while still remaining conscious. If it was me in that situation, I would want to become a part of the pred's breasts.

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Thank you; I'm glad you enjoyed it! It's interesting to imagine, I felt: having his consciousness within two girls at the same time. Being part of both of them; experiencing both their lives, as part of their body.

And I agree, I would probably favour become part of a girl's breasts. But the idea of being part of Laura's bottom would have some appeal too.

Posted by TootCore 9 years ago Report

Oh hi. How are you holding up ? Because I, am a potato.

Posted by French_snack 9 years ago Report

Not something one can often be. Best make the most of it. :p