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A quick tug, a hard slam to the ground, and that gives Greta a precious second or so to take advantage of. Rainbow comes to quickly, but it seems not quickly enough.
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Posted by ChaoskampfNunc 9 years ago Report
Well at least she gets a good view of her demise
Posted by silverspec 9 years ago Report
Blueballd again. Dammit Greta hurry up.
Posted by thirdspurs 9 years ago Report
Slow and steady man!
Posted by DarkPinkie 9 years ago Report
And down she goes. Just a last glimpse of the world before she disappears from it forever.
Posted by charlesdeleroy 9 years ago Report
Is it just me or did Greta just grow larger in that last frame? O____o
Posted by DoesNotExist 9 years ago Report
I'm trying to keep the sizes consistent but it's possible... Could also be because of the angle, and the bulge that Dash is making.
Posted by charlesdeleroy 9 years ago Report
Maybe, I went back and looked at the instances where Dash is right next to Greta.
I guess it's tricking my mind since half of Dash is already inside.
I just wish there were a bit more to the 'story' of the comic. I like little lead-ins and more interplay between characters. This was one-sided, and not merely the dominance aspect, which can work easily with characters of greatly different size and strength... but there was no dialog, no banter. Dash is very talkative, but said nothing for the most part.
It's like I said before, Dash mostly acted like Fluttershy. Had this been Fluttershy, I would have accepted it at face value, because Fluttershy really would go down this easily.
Maybe if Gilda was the one doing the eating, Dash might have been hesitant to fight her... but she still would've said more. Mainly stuff like, "Why Gilda? We were friends! We stuck together at Junior Speedsters all that time! Were you... were you always planning on eating me one day?"
There's just so much there to work with...
Posted by DoesNotExist 9 years ago Report
I'm not great with dialogue, especially in pictures where I tend to focus almost entirely on the visuals. And when it comes to vore, I usually prefer the pred to be the only one talking, taunting their prey and the like. In thar regard I guess it's inevitable that I mis-represent Dash's talkativeness.
Posted by charlesdeleroy 9 years ago Report
Ah, well, I would advise trying a bit more on the dialog side. Getting into a bit of conversation can lead to very interesting developments or simply enrich the visuals.
I had commissioned a 16-page comic a few years back from Felpur on FA, and people loved the back-and-forth between the characters.
It's not an instant sort of thing, it takes years of practice to really nail how to get into your characters' heads and write as if they're naturally conversing and reacting.