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Body Shots By Takaine -- Report

Uploaded: 8 years ago

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Tamara is the life of the party and she takes an old favorite drinking game to new levels.

(this is the first story I have ever written. I am very very new at this. I hope you all enjoy and I very much welcome any constructive criticism)

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Takaine

Posted by Takaine 8 years ago Report

My apologies the formatting didn't come out as well as i hoped.

darc22005

Posted by darc22005 8 years ago Report

Yeah makes it a bit harder to read. I kinda just zoom in the page to make it easier. IF you can fix the format ild like to read it

Takaine

Posted by Takaine 8 years ago Report

I uploaded another version that is a little better in formatting. (easier to read on the website). Normally I would scrap a debacle like this but I'm going to keep it up seeing as its mt first ever post in any manner such as this.

darc22005

Posted by darc22005 8 years ago Report

Shows how you improved right

PhantomWolf

Posted by PhantomWolf 8 years ago Report

Not bad not bad you have potential Im impressed

Mastercin

Posted by Mastercin 8 years ago Report

A wonderful story! Separate your paragraphs more and try to make who is talking more apparent but other wise very well done! Please write more!