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Tags: aphrodisiac Biting bloodplay Catgirl Coercion Dark Demi-Human Dirty Talk Domination dub-con fangs forcefulness hair pulling Heat High Priest inhuman tendencies knight Licking Lust male demon manipulation mentions of murder Non-consensual Non-Vore Original Character past experimentation Priest ragnarok online scratching Sex Sexual content smut Stained Glass
Lord knightress Farona’s deepest secret is uncovered and she finds herself on the run, stripped of her rank, and faced with the terror that she may be sent back to the only place she would call hell. She finds temporary solace in the Church of Prontera, until a familiar face rears his bunny-band wearing head and with it, numerous revelations that change everything she thought she knew. Run as she did from her past, it always found a way to catch up to her—but now in a way she never could have forseen.
Excerpt: His ever-present smile never wavered. “Things didn’t quite go as I planned. After all, your irritating little friend screwed up everything. He was supposed to die–and that raging idiot let you get between him and that monster. It took some quick thinking on my part to rescue you without being seen, but that bastard also still managed to survive. Pity…”
“Y-You’re a priest!” she burst out frantically, hands shooting up in the air. “You save people! Not–not plot to get them killed! Father Reinfield will never let that–”
“Farona,” he interrupted all too calmly. “You wanted the truth. I’m giving it to you.”
Notes: This is based from an old story idea of mine years and years ago that I never wrote past the first chapter (here: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7042802/1/Wild-Rose-Chronicles-of-the-Eight-Seals). I have since become re-inspired to play around with them and write later parts of the story. (Three parts and going.)
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Posted by starrynight 8 years ago Report
I like this one!
Highly sexy, and very well written. Can't wait to see if you continue it!
Posted by Chameleonette 8 years ago Report
Thank you!
I'm really glad that you liked it and enjoyed the writing. Thanks a lot for the feedback! I appreciate it a lot. :) I have two more parts of this written currently and more to come!
Posted by Belloc 8 years ago Report
I like the time you take to set things up and get them going. The build up is very powerful, and you have a really sensual way of writing that works well here. Great job!
This really changes all those cheerful pictures of Yune you've got. XD
Posted by Chameleonette 8 years ago Report
Thanks a lot! I'm really glad that the build up had that effect. It probably would have been a lot more powerful with the entire story before this, but I lost all of those notes and things so many years ago that I wouldn't have been able to write the whole thing now. I'm settling for this point on, with touching back on things that happened. But I'm glad the writing style worked out!
Hahaha, I know, right? Never know what's hiding behind a smile.
Thanks a lot for the feedback!
Posted by Marauder 8 years ago Report
I'm a bit jealous of other people's ability and yours in particularly to keep things interesting without immediatly jumping to the juicy parts. It makes the stories quite a bit better.
I personally feel that when I write myself it's "useless clutter nobody wants to see" and then increasingly remove everything.
But it does end up adding "character" to the characters, even in your shorter stories it makes one more invested in the story and what happens to the characters.
Posted by Chameleonette 8 years ago Report
I find that outlining things to happen in the story, in each part (or even just listing a few ideas) helps to keep things "happening", so to speak. And it gives me something to build up from before getting to the main part of a story or chapter.
It really comes down to what you feel comfortable in writing, though, and what your own style is. Even if you may feel it's useless clutter, that does not mean that the readers are going to. If it helps build the story/characters, taking it all out could do more harm than good. And at the same time, it's about finding a balance that works for you and your stories.
I'm glad that my writing/stories have that effect, though. I strive to build up and bring out characters and plot more than just the "big bang". Thanks. :)
Posted by Hariken 8 years ago Report
I read it. I finally read the first chapter. Where to begin, where to begin...
I think I knew why I put off reading it for so long. I'm not familiar with Ragnarok Online whatsoever. It's more than likely fear of diving into a new world and not knowing anything that's going on, where something is, who is what, what is what, ect., though I did manage to read your Finders Eaters story, the bit of descriptions that were there every now and then did help immensely. And with this one, the stage did not move whatsoever, which probably helped my imagination while reading.
You paint a beautiful picture with words, that's for damn sure. I had expected Farona and Yune to turn out a bit differently, character-wise/personality-wise, but, Farona might be similar to how you write other females. I'm not sure. Yune? Unsure as well for males, but, their backgrounds do help.
There's only two things that bothered me with the story: where the hell Farona's shirt went ( I might've completely missed where it was discarded ), and the dubcon of the entire scenario of the sex. Dubcon and noncon are two things I do not like, but MAYBE, just maybe, dubcon is okay in fantasy. Fantasy VS reality all and all.
A job well done; I thank you for sharing this world with us all, and these two with us. I eagerly await when the hell I'll read the next segments that are released thus far, and grow ever more thirsty for more of this duo. Expect more questions! Always the questions.
And I'll start with this one: the tag specifically shows m/F, implying "younger male with older female". Is she older? They were both children I assume when they were experimented on, but I do have to wonder.
Posted by Chameleonette 8 years ago Report
Yeah, that's perfectly understandable. I know a lot of people aren't familiar with RO. But it's enough of an open fantasy world that hopefully explaining the surroundings/etc does enough not to take away from the story. I'm glad that the descriptions helped!
Thank you kindly. These are characters I have had for a very, very long time, so lots of this was always stewing around without being written. This part would not have happened until way late in their story, but it's something I always wanted to write.
As for her shirt, it went with the armor when that came off. lol But yeah, I put the tags in as a warning for people that do not like that kind of thing. You didn't have to force yourself to read it if you don't like that. lol
Thanks, though, and I'm glad you liked it despite that. And feel free to ask questions. :)
Haha, well, truth be told, that "m/F SEX" was a default tag that was already in there and popped up when I was trying to find appropriate tags for it. There's no significance to that. Farona is actually younger, but not by much. A couple years, only.
Posted by Hariken 8 years ago Report
I'm wondering if the scene you wanted to happen was more of them meeting, or the actual sex happening. I do not know them very well ( the other pictures I've seen of them has Yune wanting the sex "quite a bit" possibly ) as of yet, but curiosity still grows.
Did it? Oh, huh. With some tags I skim them, and with your tags I think I know by now what kind of stuff you'll post, so I'm okay with it. "The kind of stuff" being great pictures, and very good stories.
It is? Huh. Other tagged things with the tag show "younger male/older female" sometimes I think, but it's a good clarification. She's younger? Ooh. Daddy chaser! ( Please ignore that. ) As for other questions, no real coherant ones just yet, only "MOAR" ~
Posted by Chameleonette 8 years ago Report
Some of both? Haha, but mostly I wanted to write what I call "the reveal". Where she finds out who he is and how he's known it was her since the day they "met" at the Payon caves. They're two people who have suffered the same terrors and been turned into something less than human, but they're two sides of a coin, because she still tried to embrace what was left of her humanity and he pushed that part of him away, living a life of deceit and walking a path of revenge. Whereas she's taken a more righteous path, becoming a knight and protecting people. They've taken completely different paths from the same tragic origins. And the moment when that's all laid out on the floor between them, that's what I've wanted to write for a long time. He's always known who she was, but until that moment, she never realized who he was.
Well, I'll avoid that tag from now on, then. I thought it was just a tag for M/F sex in general, not something specific. But yeah, there's plenty more there, if you ever want to read it.
Posted by Hariken 8 years ago Report
It'll be interesting to see how it'll play out now that Farona has a set in mind of turning him in, but then I can think of what might happen. Poor girl. Of course, learning more about both of them overall will be a grand treat. Tasty for information!
'Tis up to you either way. I think you can edit them even if they pop up, can't you? Or just on the tags here. I haven't uploaded something in so long.