What makes it not very good? Don't be so hard on yourself, ya goof. I thought it was very creative and the descriptions were great. I Especially liked the slip n' slide reference. You really put the reader down into that stomach. I do think our mousy hero is fucked, though. Especially after inhaling stomach acid (nice touch there, btw :). I think Michael should successfully digest our hero, gaining mousy hearing/stealth attributes from his meal and continue to be an ongoing antagonist in Vore Wars.
Posted by HypnoBitch 7 years ago Report
I know it's not very good. Later on I'll get back into the swing of things.
Posted by BNCrazy 7 years ago Report
What makes it not very good? Don't be so hard on yourself, ya goof. I thought it was very creative and the descriptions were great. I Especially liked the slip n' slide reference. You really put the reader down into that stomach. I do think our mousy hero is fucked, though. Especially after inhaling stomach acid (nice touch there, btw :). I think Michael should successfully digest our hero, gaining mousy hearing/stealth attributes from his meal and continue to be an ongoing antagonist in Vore Wars.
Posted by HypnoBitch 7 years ago Report
You guys have to vote in my blog poll to choose how he survives!~
Posted by HypnoBitch 7 years ago Report
Here is the link to the poll to decide what happens next! https://aryion.com/forum/blog/HypnoBitch/vore_wars_chapter_1_published_view-viewpoll_b-33242.html
Posted by LastRider100 7 years ago Report
This is rather good :) It has a lot of potential. Don't be so hard on yourself. Chin up girl! And best of luck to you :D
Posted by HypnoBitch 7 years ago Report
:D I'm a dude! And ok!
Posted by LastRider100 7 years ago Report
Hahaha! Okay, sorry. 'Chin up lad!'