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Water Park Mishaps, Part1 By IEatYouWhole -- Report

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A 3 and a half page story I wrote for the fun of it, trying to get back into drawing, but till then, ill be working on short and long stories for a bit. (updated)

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Mondeur

Posted by Mondeur 7 years ago Report

Nice to see you're writing again. Can't wait for part 2!

GeneralUrist

Posted by GeneralUrist 7 years ago Report

The premise is pretty cool, but honestly it was very hard to read. I mean, HOLY MOTHER OF RUN ON SENTENCES! You need to be much less conservative with full stops.

IEatYouWhole

Posted by IEatYouWhole 7 years ago Report

meh, I read it fine, plus it was better set out on word than on here :P it all smushed together :P