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Saving the family from the vores fixed By Personad -- Report

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Hey everybody!
Two things.
One: i liked to thank Vmaster608 for offering to spend their time to make some corrections to some of my stories that they did to make it sound better.
And two: the reason why I'm uploading this again is because my re-upload is only producing the same pre-corrected version so if you see the same thing again, you know the reason.
Thanks for all the support and I'll talk to you about more stuff later.

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venomousdreams

Posted by venomousdreams 7 years ago Report

Feels... Rushed. Good, but rushed. Very little detail.

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

Sorry I couldn't put in more details. I will try to be more descriptive with the next one.

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

remember my idea and hell have Amber join the family and maybe give cathy kids and cathy can eat them when ever she wants

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

Don't worry I will
Just have to wait until after I finish with Cheerleaders.

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

Ok and hell add Amber's family as well and maybe all will have a child from Cathy and she can eat them and keep them alive when ever she wants

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

All I could thinks about if someone draws this out and seeing how big Cathy will be.
But thanks for the ideas, I'll add them to the list of what I will do for this month.

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

Ok thank you

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

Hell it would be nice to see that family get bigger

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

You are a very ambitious person who loves things that will make a person's belly bigger.
Clearly you have good tastes.

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

Thank you hell making her mother sisters her neighboers and amber and her family pregnant would fill cathy up very much

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

I'm going to have to save your's when thanksgiving comes up cause Cathy is going to be stuffed.

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

Yeah and Cathy will get them all pregnant some how

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

A possibility for either a scientific accident occurring.
Or having them in her womb.
Speaking of which, wanna introduce Unbirth in this or no?

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

Maybe because she has to get them pregnant and eat them with out digesting them

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

True. Alright screw it I'll add Unbirth to this
Im a huge Unbirth fan anyways

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

But cathy will still give the women her children

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

Alright, alot to take in.
Hey think you can describe how you want the sequel to play out?
Like when does someone gets eaten first, and then who gets unbirthed so I can start planning an outline?

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

I would say Cathy's mother unbirthed and her neighbors mother eaten first and she will not get pregnant with her mother in her womb but she can get her other women pregnant

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

Oh ok
Tomorrow I will send you a message about an outline I have for it.
But for now, I need to work on the cheerleader smorgasbord.

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

Ok and I can't wait and how about cathy can get women pregnant when they are in her womb

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

or how ever

Personad

Posted by Personad 7 years ago Report

Alright.
I like your style

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

thanks

darklord42

Posted by darklord42 7 years ago Report

and cathy keeps all prediators not in the family away from hers