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Interstellar Dino stripper By Portal124 -- Report

Uploaded: 7 years ago

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Makuta gets invited a space strip club and meet the sexy dino stripper from the season finale of Rick and Morty.

Hopefully she doesn't overwhelm him to much

Commission for  Makuta

Thumbnail: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/25345831/

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Gabriel0813

Posted by Gabriel0813 7 years ago Report

i like the story

helenarlet

Posted by helenarlet 5 years ago Report

Well it says to speak my mind because you need improvement in story format, so...
I can't help but notice that the story switches from narrative past to narrative present part way through for no reason. You're generally not supposed to do that. But other than the few typos I noticed (and let's be honest, we all suffer from those from time to time) I didn't really see anything else that stood out as needing correction.
Otherwise I really liked the story. It's nice seeing someone write something about the Interstellar Demon Stripper. I haven't come across any stories about her before.