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Chapter 13 of the Five Goddesses, in which Kalia obtains the power of all six elements
So to those of who were hoping for Kalia to win, I suppose you could stop reading the story at this chapter and let that be the end of it. To everyone else, well...see you next chapter!
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Posted by BlueMarvel611 6 years ago Report
Hey good to see a new chapter up, Nobodyman. Seriously I've been feeling drained mentally through some tough things going through my mind. Reviewing your work along with others helps with easing up on tension within me. That said on with the review!
Wow...you just surprised me with this chapter. Mostly with the first part explaining a bit about the world of Terrania's history with humans being the slaves of the Dark Ones. Not to mention on how Rhaya, the first goddess of Terrania along with the gift of Durendal and an army of humans to fight back against the Dark Ones. Though Rhaya was wise about not wiping out the Dark Ones as they too are part of the world and are needed for balance. This almost reminds me a bit of ancient mythology I studied in high school once.
Next came with the emergence of Kalia in her new form. Though seriously this reminds me of a movie I've watched once. Mostly with Kaila now having grown herself at the size of a Titan. And boy does she show it while not just lifting up the island of Aganon but actually to swallow it whole just to be sure the power of Durendal won't be used against her. Another thing that got my attention was the way of how Demi retaliated against the now giant goddess. It was honestly action packed with how you wrote the fight of a bug sized Demi fighting against Kalia. Though also what caught my eye was how you described Kalia new hunger before she devoured the island. With how as a goddess, she never needed food but now she was relishing in her hunger for anything she could get her hands on.
Kalia definitely proved it as she was finally able to stop Demi's assault with her fingers and tossed her to her mouth. Though you can't fault Demi for trying to fight back as she definitely proved to be an obstacle to Kalia's plan to release the Dark One's into the realm. Not to mention of how she asked for the dark goddess' reasons for causing such havoc only to be answered by a mad rant.
Anyways it's sorta creepy and frightening with how you managed to write about a manifestation of Kalia capturing Demi on her giant form's tongue using dark tendrils! Still it was amazing of how you are able to capture Kalia's sensation of having eaten the human warrior woman. Not to mention of her annoyance at Demi's continued resistance while in her stomach! Though it would not lost for long as she had Demi join the rest inside her main stomach. I would like to see how that turns out...though worried too.
All in all this chapter really brought me to the edge of my seat. Not just that but it makes me want to know what's going on in Kalia's now hungry giant stomach as Demi goes through it. I can't wait to see. Plus would help me with my own nerves too through life. Laters and keep up the good work.
Elias Azule
The Blue Marvel
Posted by Nobodyman 6 years ago Report
Cool! Glad I was able to surprise you. I hope things go better for you as far as your stress.
Posted by BlueMarvel611 6 years ago Report
Yes seriously I do hope so too. I do not need any more stress in my life. So keep it coming NB.
Posted by Scion 6 years ago Report
:p
I just want to see Kalia get stronger - absorb durendal and the dark ones