Since I haven't posted anything lately I thought I would put up the early (and pretty rough) draft for part 5. Still needs a fair bit of polish, but feedback is always welcome. :)
I still havent figured out why the formatting causes the spacing to get all screwy when I upload these. I think I just need to use a txt document or something.

In this chapter - Thomas shows Adeline the collection of Old Tech devices that he brought with him to assist in the hunt for Elijah, and she begins to suspect what he really is. He tracks down a possible lead and lands in some trouble with a pair of large, hungry Lythians, lucky for him he understands the effects of Elysium as few others could.

I think that I am getting a little better at writing sexy scenes as I do more of them, they still seem a bit wordy but I'm trying to keep the pacing from getting to fast. I'm also working out how to write in various dialects and types of speech. I realize that some of the dialog may be a bit... unreadable... at the moment but I hope to iron that out and fix it when I post the final draft. Or not... I may never really get the knack of it.

10,000 words

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