Just a quick grammar note: in the last paragraph, the final "she's" would fit verb tense better as "she'd" to stay the same as what the tense was throughout the paragraph.
Otherwise, good background. An interesting way of explaining a character without it feeling so much like an infodump.
Posted by NightRoller 6 years ago Report
Just a quick grammar note: in the last paragraph, the final "she's" would fit verb tense better as "she'd" to stay the same as what the tense was throughout the paragraph.
Otherwise, good background. An interesting way of explaining a character without it feeling so much like an infodump.
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Posted by Xodiusk 6 years ago Report
Ah, thank you, didn't notice that when I proofread. Just getting into this so I won't be perfect, so that helps plenty.
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