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If you look at the average number of words written since my first submission and this one, you'll find it is only just above 20 per day. Woops.
As always, feedback is appreciated since that's the only way to improve!
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Posted by sharky 6 years ago Report
pretty good, would like to have seen some digestion in the story
Posted by Philosoraptor 6 years ago Report
Entertaining and well written story though I would have liked a little more backstory, like how the 'dragon' was found, perhaps in a comatose state in remote icy cavern somewhere, and is being studied by the military in secrecy or something.... for otherwise the discovery of the remarkable beast would be front page news around the world. Also if it had not spoken to another human in three hundred years one would also think it language would be a bit more archaic. It would also have been nice to see that the creature made its escape... possibly as a set up for a sequel. Thanks for sharing!