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This is meant to be a shorter story with less world/ character building. I'll still be writing the longer stories as I think of stories to tell. expect more of these shorter stories as well
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Posted by Narkotic 6 years ago Report
To be honest, this is a pretty good read although I had some problems reading this regarding Punctuation marks. There are some sentences where you could have put a comma in them. Aside from that, I guess I wanted a little bit more, this felt a little rushed and although it is a pretty good story, I wish you could have put in Adrien's experiences inside, or put more detail in the Digestion process. Anyways, I would love to read more from you though