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This is a fictional story about a girl, the boy she loves, and the things that keep them separated.

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VVVx

Posted by VVVx 5 years ago Report

Oh crap, I just realized reading the "profile" Alina did that this is the same Rebecca from "Collar"! A sense of continuity is rare in these stories. You're doing great with this.

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VVVx

Posted by VVVx 5 years ago Report

Also, you do a really great job of characterization. I don't really know how to feel about Alina because she's a stalker, but I also can't hate her because she's trying to save someone. So I have to root for her even though I'm a bit disturbed.

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VVVx

Posted by VVVx 5 years ago Report

That talk at the end also makes it hard to dislike her.

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Progressive

Posted by Progressive 5 years ago Report

It is the same Rebecca, some years later.

Alina is supposed to be a flawed but redeemable character, so I'm glad that you are conflicted about how to feel about her.

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threk

Posted by threk 5 years ago Report

Not sure how much I support Alina being a blatant stalker, but that ending was really sweet. Also you're doing an incredible job with characterisation.

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TastesUndivided

Posted by TastesUndivided 5 years ago Report

I fucking love this character!!! She is so determened and awkward at the same time. She is pathetic in a way that makes you want to give her a push to keep up the fight. I am seriously rooting for her.

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Progressive

Posted by Progressive 5 years ago Report

Alina is a great character for telling this story. I'm glad you're rooting for her.

And thanks for leaving a comment - I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

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TastesUndivided

Posted by TastesUndivided 5 years ago Report

I sure am so far. Currently at part 4

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