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Grace Williams's life is finally looking up. After a few months of "interviews" that always end with her in the stomach of a supervillain, her love of being his prey has blossomed. It's a good thing his girlfriend is so understanding.
Emma is from the Intro story for this series, and if you're willing to read cooking vore she also appears in "Dating the Enemy"
Grace is from part one of "Interview with a Villain" (Which wasn't called part one because I didn't plan this far ahead)
As always, let me know what you like, but more importantly let me know what needs work. I've been writing vore stuff for only a bit more than a week, and honestly I prefer cooking vore to oral vore so I could use some feedback on where to improve.
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Posted by SweetAsPi 5 years ago Report
The interview was interesting. I'm getting the vibe that Blake feels guilty, at least somewhat, about his rape fetish, and is doing this whole social engineering thing to try and mitigate that, since to him anyone who came there knowing the risks must actually be into it too. I can't tell from the text whether you're going for 'Designing the setting so that it's really all rape-play with consent being understood' or 'He's trying to justify living out his fantasies, but he IS still a villain willing to do horrible things to people who really might not be consenting.' Either way, it gives some nice insight into the character. Still don't have much of a feel for the larger setting, though.
As for the fun part, the sandwiched sex was great, if rushed. And the idea of swallowing them in the same position is a lovely one, but it really could have used more description on that part. The only part where I had a picture of what they were *feeling* was the vibrations from laughter.
All in all, another nice bit of setting/character exposition delivered in a cute way.
Posted by TastyBisexual 5 years ago Report
Thanks for the feedback
Yeah Blake is a fun character to write, and I'm liking that you were able to get that from what I wrote.
The larger setting is something I think I might have to just write some info dumps for, the interview series was supposed to be exposition without being lame, but there's a lot to go over here. I added that little blurb at the end to leave open potentially using a sort of Red Raider Youtube channel (Their Youtube is much less strict about sexy stuff) as another way of dropping lore in story form. What's your opinion, straight info dump or do shorts like this that might or might not have sex/vore framed as webshows?
Beyond that, I think I just need to get my confidence up and just write more. I don't have much experience writing this sort of thing, and my idea of what a decent length is is obviously shorter and less detailed than it should be.
Thanks for the feedback, it's nice to get comments.
Posted by SweetAsPi 5 years ago Report
Given where we're posting this, I don't think straight info dumps are likely to go over well...I know I usually skip over those unless it's for a setting that I'm already really invested in. I'd say let the setting details trickle in naturally in your stories, and then when there's something you really want the audience to know that doesn't fit easily do one of these shorts. Youtube clips, interviews...you could even show a college lecture on, say, history, and have the teacher eat or get eaten at the end or something.
I do get the confidence and experience issue. I keep feeling like I'm going too far the other way and making mine too wordy, so...I dunno. The noob trying to advise the noob I guess, lol.
Posted by TastyBisexual 5 years ago Report
Yeah, that's probably the best idea.
Noobs unite