Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 5 years ago Report

I had the same problem with formatting before. Try converting the file into a Microsoft Word Document from 2000-2003. That cleared the problem right up for me.

On the story front, great story. I liked the cruelty. Pretty good for it being your first story.

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

Alright thanks a lot, I'll try that for next time.

Posted by kokeman 5 years ago Report

That's a pretty nice story! And that could be the starting point to create a series about Emma and Jack! Neat!

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

Thanks! If people really seem to like this story I'll try see if I can come up with more for it. :)

Posted by MidNightOwlArt 5 years ago Report

I’m not normally into giantess but man was this a great story!
I understood every little detail and it was a wonderful read.
Hope to see more from you in 2020! ^__^

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

Appreciate it! Cheers!

Posted by Himmi99 5 years ago Report

That is a great story & I would love to read a sequel of it. Keep up the great work

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

Thanks! ...Maybe after my next story I'll try my best write up a sequel.

Posted by Himmi99 5 years ago Report

If im allowed to give you ideas, my thought after the story was that it wasn't yet finished. That's why I thought a sequel would be great. My idea is that they kinda get together & Emma eats some students secretly for herself while Jack enjoys it. Especially the one Jack had a conversation with earlier. But because Jack was a lot teased & as you said you wanted Jack to be eaten, I think it would be the perfect ending for it.


Last but not least I just want to say that you are really talented & can become a great writer around here. I will keep following you.

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

I always love to hear peoples ideas of what I should write, so thank you for that. Sometimes I have a lot of trouble coming up with ideas myself so hearing what other people think is really helpful.

I can't promise that my next story will be a sequel to this story but it seems like some people are interested in a sequel so I'll do my best to try make it happen.

Again, thank you for the kind words. I really appreciate it!

Posted by Adder4118 5 years ago Report

Thumbnail?

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

What's the question lol? It's a small piece of a random free stock image online, if that's what you mean... don't remember from exactly where.

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

I was really hoping you would review my story for me, I've always loved your work. So first off, thank you for taking the time.

Um, so yeah it took me a while to write this story... I even started it quite a bit before I mentioned I was planning on writing in your comments. I think it took so long because I never really planned out what was going to happen. I had a basic idea but no direction. I've actually almost re-written it three times. Originally the there was a whole other character, not in this version of the story, which was the prey. And in the second version Jack was the prey. I do kinda regret not making him the prey because he was the one getting teased the most but I wanted to try have someone watch a cruel pred do their thing.

Anyway... I completely agree with what you said about the lack of description of both her body, mouth and the digestion scenes. It was in the back of my mind the whole time as I was writing. I went back to look at other stories from other writers such as yours and couldn't believe how imaginative some of you guys get. Definitely going to work on being more creative and in-depth with my descriptions for the future. Also, I might keep the perspective to one character for the entire story next time. Felt like the perspective was really inconsistent.

Finally, I have to honest about the ending... I also feel like I should have made Emma eat Jack but I never did because I just wanted to hurry and finish the story so I could start on others. Probably a big mistake on my part... Maybe i'll rewrite it in the future, we'll see...

Oh, I forgot, I also learned I'd rather do prey smaller than regular humans rather than a pred larger than regular humans. It was really hard to imagine someone so big existing around regular human infrastructure. Anyway... I'm typing too much. Really looking forward to your upcoming stories. Thanks a lot. Cheers!

Posted by Hozomat 5 years ago Report

Oh boy, that was quite the story. I think 11k words is a lot, but the thumbnail did catch my attention (no wonder Jack was charmed by it) so I did manage to read through!

Overall, the teasing was grrreat. With each tease, we could feel we were getting closer, and the foreshadowing of Jessie's fate was the cherry on top!

Speaking of Jessie... Well I felt bad for her :( she was Jack's best friend and all of a sudden Jack abandoned her. I usually prefer when the prey is either a random person or either one who kinda deserves to be eaten, like Ralph. But in the other hand, the foreshadowing would have had much less impact!...
Ugh, I'm torn apart. It was both exciting and saddening x)

I just wish the internal scene was longer. More struggle, more massage from Jack, more highlight of Jessie's situation, surrounded by carrots...
But hey, for a first story, that was superb.

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

Hey, thanks for the comment, really glad you liked it! Yeah, 11k is a lot but I found that, for me at least, having the story build up to the vore makes it a lot more intense, which I really like.

From the comments people left me, I got a lot of new ideas for the sequel that I've already started working on. So that may actually be the next thing I publish on this site rather than a completely new story. So if you liked this story, you'll probably like the next two.

Oh yeah, and I've read your giantess stories a while back. Really enjoyable stories with great thumbnails too lol. Really liked 'When a date goes right'. I'll be waiting patiently if you ever do another giantess/macro->micro type story.

Anyway, thanks again, cheers!

Posted by Hozomat 5 years ago Report

Oh, you've already seen my stuff! I'm glad you like it!
Frankly, I have no idea when my next story will come up, nor if it will come up soon (no inspiration currently :c), but when I do, I might take a few ideas from you :)

Posted by ApertureScience 5 years ago Report

So personally, I've never been a big fan of story based vore, I usually just like the short and sweet ones, but this is actually a fantastic story, I actually found myself reading it like I would any normal book, fantastic job!

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

Thanks for the kind comment, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Posted by Scrumptious 5 years ago Report

This is a great story! I didn't think she was going to swallow Jessie up - especially with witnesses present. Of course, with foreshadowing of the dog (and that it's on this site), one knew that someone was going to get swallowed up. the more the merrier. ;-)

As far as 'cruel pred' goes for the tag, I don't think this really went to the level of cruel. All she did was swallow someone up and digest them. There was no excess humiliation or violence. She was a perfect pred in that regard. XD

Anyway, this was the better of the two stories. I hope the conclusion is more like this one. I look forward to reading it!

Posted by iliketoread 5 years ago Report

Ah thank you. When I was writing I didn't think she was gonna swallow Jessie either. It just ended up that way.

Ok, I see how you may not see it as cruel, understandable. I guess the cruel comes more from the teasing and the lack of regret.

I'm curious to why you liked this one more than the second. I'm trying to improve so if you have the time for another comment on that, that would be great.

Thanks again!

Posted by Scrumptious 5 years ago Report

If it helps you, then I'm happy to add another two cents. As long as it doesn't deter you from writing more, because I'm rather eager to read more of what you're writing.

Just for my sake, I thought the fish angle, in particular the reminders that the fish was a fish, was a bit comic, which (IMO!) doesn't do the vore theme favors. I know of another author who goes the comic angle with his vore stories, and it just doesn't seem to work. That's not to say that the fish side-story itself was misplaced; the third installment will tell if it was a foreshadow or just a detour.

There also seemed to be some copy-editing issues, which I noticed less in the first story (e.g. the strange spaces in the following sentence, underscore mine:
“_She looks adorable. K_ind . W_arm. No way someone like her would willingly swallow someone whole, right?” ).

In the first story, what I really liked was the way you really made Jessie's swallowing (the highlight of the story) exciting. By comparison, Ralph was such a douche that I didn't really care. I think there's more dramatic tension when the prey doesn't seem to deserve their fate. Also, Raplph was over-the-top one-dimensional that he didn't feel human to me, which also deflates the poignancy of the vore.

Overall, it felt like you took much more care with the first story, and were more playful with the second. Sometimes playfulness works, because you don't stifle yourself, at other times the extra care and attention help things along. In this case, I think the balance was to the latter.

Anyway, I hope these pointers help. I really look forward to seeing what you make of that third installment.

Posted by Ragnow 4 years ago Report

Love the story. I think the scenario is a bit silly of the giantess being abnormally huge and attending University but still getting away with murder, but your writing is more than engaging enough that I got over my qualms with the scenario quickly.

The teasing is great, the slow swallow is great, and I loved that Jack ends up abandoning his best friend to let her get swallowed by a hot giantess. I only wish that we got to see a little bit more description after Jack leaves to let Jessie be digested, preferably from Jessie's perspective in the stomach, but that's just a very small nitpick of an otherwise very well written scenario!

Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report

Thanks for the comment Ragnow! Yeah I agree with the whole scenario being silly but hopefully it came out remotely believable. This was my first story so to be honest I didn't put too much effort into trying to convince the reader that there is a university that exists with a student this big.

Yeah the teasing is pretty awesome, I love good teasing in a story. And I totally agree with wanting to see more description after Jack leaves Jessie. A horrendous mistake from me. Fortunately I think I did a lot better with that in the following stories. So if you liked this one im sure you'll like the others ones even more. Hope to see more comments from you in the future.

Cheers!

Posted by Rissery 4 years ago Report

Very nice story, good world-building. I struggle with that, so my writing tends to stick with established locations and stuff. I would like to see a continuation of it.
I only noticed a couple typos, so it's pretty good in that area, too.

Posted by iliketoread 4 years ago Report

Thanks for taking the time to comment on my work Rissery! It's my first story so it's not perfect but I think it did a decent job at the whole world building part. Fortunately, I've already made a part 2 and 3 to the story you can go read if you like. (Unless this comment was meant for all three parts) but I do plan on making a part 4 too!

Thanks again!

Posted by xvx17 2 years ago Report

What just happened was very strange (I don't mean the story) I was reading this and after finishing I wanted to leave a comment with how much I liked it and some criticism. Then I realize that this story is 2 years old and that there is also a remastered version. I felt like a time traveler, how crazy!