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My first attempt at a story. Any and all critique is appreciated.
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Posted by Kabei 5 years ago Report
Amazing story, loved the situations you had the characters in.
Posted by threk 5 years ago Report
Brutal, cool story
Posted by arabicaj33 5 years ago Report
Oh wow,that's really good story!
I've never been a big fan of the role of the victim and/or hard digestion and violence , but imagining myself beeing tied up, held, face-smothered by my captors and beeing slowly swallowed by some beautiful predator, knowing that it's gonna be even worse, makes me change my mind.
Thanks for sharing it with us!
lol finally registered here to leave this comment
Posted by Ediblestranger 5 years ago Report
I'm glad you enjoyed it! I hope I can continue to impress.
Posted by dcvfgb1234 5 years ago Report
A really lovely story and I really liked how you made her win in the end. Definitely wouldn't mind seeing more from that universe, though after the two stories in it it might be hard to find something else to do there.
Posted by dcvfgb1234 5 years ago Report
A really lovely story and I really liked how you made her win in the end. Definitely wouldn't mind seeing more from that universe, though after the two stories in it it might be hard to find something else to do there.
Posted by Bright 2 years ago Report
Really like the revenge ending of this one.