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This is the promised squeal to "Olivia Moves In" for anyone who is interested. This might be riddled with errors, but after 2 hours of editing Im just about ready to never edit anything again.
Also I really appreciate all the feedback on the other stories ive posted. For this one I took the criticism on its predecessor to heart and tried to address those issues, hopefully ive made some progress there.
For anyone interested theres actually an alternative version of this with a different ending. I might still post it as an alternative. Again let me know what you think! thanks for the support!
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Posted by stuffedbellygirl 5 years ago Report
Amazing story! You write character stuff so well it makes them feel realistic, plus the way you describe the swallowing and everything after is marvellous!
Posted by franciscofranco 5 years ago Report
Thanks! im looking to improve with everything I write and I feel like i accomplished that here :)
Posted by AllRightAllNight 5 years ago Report
Great stuff, would definitely be interested in reading the alternate version. I like the thumbnail too, is that uploaded anywhere?
Posted by franciscofranco 5 years ago Report
Glad you like it! The alt version may be incoming eventually, it's certainly something im still interested in. As for the icon, I only edit those for the icons so there isn't really anything else to upload, it's just what you see. But if there ever was I would absolutely post it in either the Photo edit forum or on my DA
Posted by joecool 5 years ago Report
Amazing, hope to see the alternative version
Posted by franciscofranco 5 years ago Report
Thanks! It's actually pretty far of the way done and would certainly be something id like to get out there. I have some other projects in the works right now but with luck ill get back to it soon enough
Posted by GladiatusTheSaldrak 5 years ago Report
can I see the full image of the thumbnail plz?
Posted by franciscofranco 5 years ago Report
Alas there isn't a full image, For these thumbnails i just edit as needed. Thus the uncropped version of this is just a stock photo with only this part edited. However I can promise you that if I ever made a full image and used it as an icon I would 100% post that image on the photo edit forum. :)
Posted by BardicLasher 5 years ago Report
Soooo alternate ending? I'm curious to see!
Posted by joecool 4 years ago Report
Still hoping for an alternate end