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I'll be frank here, I'm nervous about posting online.
But regardless, I wanted to write more work, and its pointless not sharing what few stories I manage to complete.
Synopsis: Involves a timid and closet voraphile getting teased by a overwhelmingly large beauty.
Also, I won't lie, BIGBIG, D3adZ3d , and JackNoName are super influential on my current taste, A certain amount of credit goes to them for my inspiration.
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Posted by WilderHoney 5 years ago Report
Proper job.
Posted by TinnedSpam 5 years ago Report
????????
Posted by TinnedSpam 5 years ago Report
(☞ﾟ∀ﾟ)☞
Posted by WilderHoney 5 years ago Report
Keep at it, I really enjoyed reading this.
I also like the wider breaks between each paragraph. It really improves readability when you're as easily distracted as I am.
Posted by glargicus 5 years ago Report
It's definitely really scary putting yourself out there, but you've got nothing to worry about. You've done a great job with this story, and you've it shows you put a lot of effort into it with the world building and everything.
If you want some small tips for improvement, I'll use the following sentence as an example: "Raz nodded and was about to thank her for the tour before the giantesses belly interrupted once again, followed by its owner interrupting."
There's some fairly minor grammatical mistakes (e.g. Giantesses should be giantess') but to be honest a lot of people won't even pick up on that, and I know from personal experience how hard it can be to catch things like that in your own writing. Also you very occasionally re-use the same word too close together (e.g. Interrupt).
Anyway, please don't let these minor criticisms hold you back from producing more content; this is surprisingly polished work from a new author.
Oh, and also don't be surprised if long-form stuff gets less attention than quick grab-n-gulps, a lot of people will be just looking for a, err, 'quick fix". You'll find there are some people out there who have the time for this kind of work and really appreciate it though.
Posted by TinnedSpam 5 years ago Report
Thank you so much for the advice, I'll make sure to put it into effect for next time, (^～^;)ゞ
Posted by glargicus 5 years ago Report
No worries, I look forward to seeing what you produce next!
Posted by TinnedSpam 5 years ago Report
Thank you so much for the advice, I'll make sure to put it into effect for next time, (^～^;)ゞ