Posted by ethan3369 4 years ago Report

What was the form originally intended for Bobby to be?

Posted by Firstfate 4 years ago Report

A Drider originally, but Driders are technically "superior" monsters of Darkness. Spiders are a lower form of Darkness monster and can progress into more monsterous(less intelligent) Driders, but most are usually captured by demons and recruited into demonic armies, thus being forcibly turned into demons themselves.

Posted by NightRoller 4 years ago Report

Disregarding the rather defensive warning about comments (seriously, being able to take constructive criticism (or find some use for even destructive criticism) is a valuable skill for a writer), I wanted to mention a few things:
1. I was initially reminded of the Main Character of "That time I got Reincarnated as a Slime", but the main character here soon differentiated itself more than enough.
2. It seems like characters and stats here are similar to DnD in some respects?
3. This story was surprisingly long but had a surprisingly interesting and coherent plot, how have you written over 15 of these already?!
4. I found your choice of using italics and bold to be... different. You use it quite a lot, and I'm not quite sure how I feel about it, besides feeling like it's potentially excessive (to be seen in future stories). Likewise, it could be quite informative for me to see another author's take on those methods of emphasis.

Posted by Firstfate 4 years ago Report

1) Yes, this story is directly inspired by "That Time I got Reincarnated as a Slime", but as you mentioned, I didn't want to merely recreate the story most people have no doubt seen in that Anime.
2) Each of the characters will have some video game/tabletop game characteristics/ stats to help me in explaining how "they" perceive the world around them after being reborn. Mainly these things are brought about each characters own preferences from their past lives on Earth and are meant to give my readers a look at what is going inside the minds of my characters
3) *cough* I have five characters planned and each WILL have 17 parts xD although some characters might technically have more than 17 chapters, that just depends on how many part Bs I plan to involve with their stories. Sometimes I have trouble condensing my ideas for a chapter, so I will have two parts to break up to lengthy post I would have otherwise, but you'll see what I mean with the next character I post for
4)I have been told I use Italics a lot and excessively, which I agree with, but I try to use the Italics mainly to show where I am putting a break in between the paragraphs and to show that what is happening between the paragraphs is not known to the characters in the story. Otherwise, yes, I do go a bit overboard with Italicizing words in my writings and I do try to curb that habit of mine, but I am trying to show readers that someone is being rather sarcastic/ sharp-tongued(italics) or is screaming hysterically/ speaking threateningly(Bold and Italics) so they do not have to reread certain sections to figure out how the character is talking to someone else.

As for my warning... I have gotten in arguements with several people over how I write and I have just grown sick and tired of repeating myself... mainly in the stories where I have no male gender and so have to deal with people asking me to add males into my stories. I write the way I do and have for many years, so I doubt I will be changing anytime soon. I want to be able to continue writing and enjoying myself doing so and then be able to enjoy the comments after I post them.