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An existential crisis is bad. But whilst inside of your student's stomach? That's not fun.
Idk if it needs any more continuation. Might do, might not. Think it ended comfortably (as comfortable as digestion is). What do the people say?
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Posted by Mechdragon1k 4 years ago Report
Not sure if I want a non fatal or fatal ending, maybe a mutiple option ending works well? I do not really see anything to really complain about, it is a pleasant read.
Posted by Freevase 4 years ago Report
Good to hear you enjoyed! Short multiple endings is a good idea though ^
Posted by LemonBarb 4 years ago Report
Honestly, if going on a fatal end. Maybe one of the endings would have been her brain/"soul" being absorbed as nourishment. And then her predator going from having 'dreams' of her prey's life, to having a 'bit' of an easier time on an exam, due to absorbing her own 'intelligence' or 'useful' quirks on top. But then it'd likely lead to a bit of angst on top.
Posted by TheMysteriousSadSack 4 years ago Report
You really got the bratty teenager character down here. As far as continuations go, maybe something where Helen isnt digested. Really though thats just my bias showing
Posted by Freevase 4 years ago Report
I'm happy to hear that she looks as bratty as I thought she did. Reckon a full tour could work, shall see ^
Posted by nousername179 4 years ago Report
Personally, I always like non-fatal/full tour as opposed to fatal. I find it more intriguing overall, possibly because of how rare it is to see by comparison to the alternatives. I also like the “nobody dies” aspect of it, just because I’m a sucker for a nice “happy” ending.
Posted by Freevase 4 years ago Report
100% agree there tbh. Especially how both pred and prey react afterwards. I don't know if that's a 'happy' ending tho lol
Posted by Rho2468 4 years ago Report
A fatal continuation would be great to see I think. Think I’m pretty alone in that seemingly lol
Posted by psicotik 4 years ago Report
Another vote for digestion! Veronica seemed pretty hungry, would be cruel not to let her gurgle her meal