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Ventress Vanishes By Trying124 -- Report

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anyonarex

Posted by anyonarex 6 months ago Report

mmmm, pretty good for an early attempt. :p nicely detailed, and i'm not usually one for star wars stuff.

Trying124

Posted by Trying124 6 months ago Report

Thank you ! Was worried I’d made it too detailed, glad you enjoyed it XD

anyonarex

Posted by anyonarex 6 months ago Report

heh, no such thing. X3 the more detailed the better.

The K

Posted by The K 4 months ago Report

Good story. I love to see Barriss Offee as a predator. My favorite parts is when Bariss burped with ventress' smell and taste, when she did her curtsy with her gut on the ground, and how you described how foul smelling the insides of her stomach were. All good.

Trying124

Posted by Trying124 4 months ago Report

Thank you very much!
Yes she’s excellent as a predator. Tho sadly underused. I appreciate giving specific feedback about what you liked. It really helps for writing the next ones.

The K

Posted by The K 4 months ago Report

My pleasure. Hope to see more elements like these in your future stories.