Posted by Astronommy 4 years ago Report

Another great chapter, and, jumping ahead, the one marking the beginning of the story's descent into Hell in regards to the feelings it induces in the reader.

It is very impressive how you keep finding ways of portraying different subtypes of the vore genre with plausible and consistent turns of the plot; between the talent pool of the two lovers, sky's the limit for what they can conceive together!

Claire's script, and the further revealed results of her preparations, are phenomenally clever, and despite the outward callous hostility of the play, Adam couldn't hope for a more flattering celebration of his tastes and his worth, and it's very heartwarming when it is revealed how much he'd enjoyed the whole thing. His own smooth transition from shock to acting must have pleased Claire a lot, too; it was also nice of him to show concern for the fate of his partner's fine cooking.

The sense of anguish in the second part came through very powerfully, as did the notes of desperation in Claire's lament in connection to her having failed at her ability to gauge her use of force and hazardous implements, and how it bode for their relationship. Claire's self-loathing taking the shape of their relationship's principal enemy was both very artfully cinematic, and true to how people tend to use images of their detractors to internally flagellate themselves.

It's good that after hashing out the crisis, the two are allowed a moment of gentle respite -- enhanced by the further refinement of their marsupial method -- before the real storm rolls in.

That line in particular: "...Shifted off her knees to sit-kneel side-saddle alongside him" is a stunning tongue-twister!

Posted by 4ofSwords 4 years ago Report

> Another great chapter, and, jumping ahead, the one marking the beginning of the story's descent into Hell in regards to the feelings it induces in the reader.

Far enough in that hopefully you're convinced to care about the characters so they can beat you about the head and shoulders with your own emotions! Muahahah!

> "...Shifted off her knees to sit-kneel side-saddle alongside him" is a stunning tongue-twister!

It is. I wracked my brain. I'm SURE there's a better term for that half-kneeling, half-sitting position, but I couldn't figure out what it was!

Posted by Astronommy 4 years ago Report

Well-written characters (or anyways-written characters in relateable situations) make for powerful empathy sinks; someday there will be justice for all the mass emotional manipulation perpetrated by the artists -- we'll have to just keep enjoying it in the meantime.

The Japanese, who have perfected the art of sitting, naturally have a term for this:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Seiza#Yokozuwari

The less sit-savvy cultures have to content themselves with composite phasing and metaphors; "side saddle" is as accurate and evocative as it gets in English, possibly.

Posted by 4ofSwords 4 years ago Report

I came across that same article! I couldn't bring myself to use that term for it, though. ;) Side-saddle (half-kneeling descriptor or not) it will have to be!