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Fatal Foursome. Violet, Ben, Chloe, Floyd. By abeabe1350 -- Report

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A story set in the CTF pill verse by LucifersChef(https://aryion.com/g4/user/LucifersChef). Planing to do another one currently the ideas are a prequel (staring Floyd, Chloe and the professor), an alternative version or a sequel. Let me know which one sound the most interesting. Also if someone can give me a tip for how to make sure the formatting looks better then I will be fixing it.

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something1337

Posted by something1337 3 years ago Report

I would recommend some whitespace in between the paragraphs, I find that it makes it more pleasing to look at and not lose where you were.

Other than that, very good work.

something1337

Posted by something1337 3 years ago Report

Just thought of a bit more just after posting that, but. Typically when you have characters talking, you should write it more like "Hello."
"Good morning to you."
"Wanna hang out?"
Basically, have each following quote on a separate line.

abeabe1350

Posted by abeabe1350 3 years ago Report

Thanks for the tip. Will keep that in mind. Any recommendation for the next story (of the three options)?

something1337

Posted by something1337 3 years ago Report

My advice/recommendation for the next story is to write what you enjoy. But I personally would like to see the prequel, since that was teased about in this one.

abeabe1350

Posted by abeabe1350 3 years ago Report

Thanks for the tip. I had a plan for all three I just wanted what people wanted to read.

something1337

Posted by something1337 3 years ago Report

No problem. And you're welcome.

Bod67

Posted by Bod67 3 years ago Report

would love a sequel

abeabe1350

Posted by abeabe1350 3 years ago Report

Will keep it in mind and thanks for the fav.

KeyteeChan

Posted by KeyteeChan 3 years ago Report

Awesome story ^^
I wonder if you would write story about merging? Maybe abouy a guy absorbing a few willing girls?

abeabe1350

Posted by abeabe1350 3 years ago Report

Might do that at some point. I have a couple of stories on the docket. One of the settings might fit pretty well for that.