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To be blunt, I'm not happy with this one. Feels too much like an exposition dump, and I should have gotten beta readers involved before I finished it, learning experience...
Anyway, our leading mouse, trapped in the curious oasis of Trevor Darke's office, finds himself hearing much of the feline perspective on the fall of his kind
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Posted by magicboy13 2 years ago Report
Now that's one hell of an exposition! This Aiden Tucker sounds very familiar too... XD
Posted by DrakeZephyr 2 years ago Report
He was based on several sources. I was keen to not reflect any real world individuals too closely. Since politics is not an issue I really write much, for good reason
Posted by DrakeZephyr 2 years ago Report
I'm not sure who that is... or if there's a joke I'm missing
Posted by sharky 2 years ago Report
Ya it was a joke. But was always I enjoy ALL your stories
Posted by Kasra 2 years ago Report
Exposition heavy, but all very interesting setting information! Sometimes it's just gotta happen.
Ah, democracy. Not the perfect system, but better than the others we've come up with...though I don't know that Karen is going to care whether or not Newton votes to be let go.
Posted by DrakeZephyr 2 years ago Report
Yes... never liked this chapter much for several reasons, primarily the exposition.
I try to mostly stay out of politics, but I do find it fun to play with different organisational structures in writing
Posted by Littledude 2 years ago Report
So at least he's not a hypocrite, he just hands troublesome mice over to someone else, judging by the container, very frequently.
Posted by DrakeZephyr 2 years ago Report
These, mouse sessions are an occassional treat he slips into his schedule. She knows about when they'll be, naturally... and she always gets the mouse.