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Tags: Absorption ass expansion Betrayal Breast Expansion brother prey Causal vore Digestion Disposal F/M Female Pred femdom florian Graphic digestion indigestion Juliana Male Prey Oral Vore pained pred Pokemon Pokemon Scarlet and Violet Possessive pred Post-Vore Reformation Same Size Scat sibling vore sister pred Sister/Brother Soft Vore toilet disposal Tsundere Pred Uncaring Pred Unwilling Prey Willing Pred
Summary: All Florian wanted to do for today was go outside and explore Paldea a little. Much to the chagrin of his sister Juliana. Will she see to it that this would be his last time?
Word Count: 6400
Author’s Note: Why is this story so short? That is because it is one of the first chapters of my first long running continuous narrative series. Unlike my other series that could be considered as several one-offs with similar themes or being loosely connected, this is going to be my first continuous narrative series.
I have no idea how long it will take me to write this entire narrative out. I am giving myself a deadline of until Gen 10’s release date. ~3 years. Why such a long deadline? Well that is because I’m going to continue writing my other stories on my gallery (Genshin, F/GO, etc.) so you don’t have to worry about this being the sole content on my gallery until it’s finished. I will try to aim for at least one chapter per month, but I’ll see how it goes as my time passes. So, however long it takes, I hope that we all enjoy this ride together.
Please comment down below about what you think of the beginning of this series.
Character Reference/Thumbnail Reference:
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Florian: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Florian_(game)#/media/File%3AScarlet_Male_Trainer.png
Juliana: https://m.bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Juliana_(game)#/media/File%3AViolet_Female_Trainer.png
Thumbnail Reference: https://mobile.twitter.com/ZeRo_artbox/status/1501133406205190145
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Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 2 years ago Report
i like this~ looking foreward to what comes next~
Posted by Fatedmeal 2 years ago Report
Thanks. I was a bit worried by how this initial chapter would do since i thought it was a bit more minimalistic when it comes to plot and characterization. Kind of the reason why I released both this chapter and the second chapter at the same time, to flesh everything out. I’m glad that this first chapter was able to get your interest despite that.
Posted by tomsketchit 2 years ago Report
Still feel lost on what triggered that little devouring at the beginning to be honest. Not sure if I accidentally skimmed past something or if it's something that's meant to be left ambiguous.
Posted by Fatedmeal 2 years ago Report
Nope. You were completely on point with your assessment. It’s meant to be left ambiguous and is in fact a plot point that will be addressed later on in the series. Thanks for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it.
Posted by rileysue 2 years ago Report
Love this series
Posted by Fatedmeal 2 years ago Report
Thanks. I’m quite enamored with this series as well. So I hope that you’ll stick with it for the long run.
Posted by Fatedmeal 1 year ago Report
Well…it fortunately led to a continuing series. Many other chapters where Florian has to face the threat of digestion. Thanks for commenting.
Posted by vorelectric 1 year ago Report
I've been seeing your stories pop around here for a while now and I finally decided to read em.
Liking the premise you're setting up in this first chapter honestly. I love me a good reformation plot device...
But there IS such a thing as "Too much".
You make use of a lot of ten dollar words when much simpler, and shorter, descriptions would have worked just as well. Granted, this story is over a year old, so your writing style might have changed by now, but even so.
Good start overall, but the flamboyant wording might be a bit much for some people.
Posted by Fatedmeal 1 year ago Report
Yea. I can get that my writing style is a bit difficult to get used to, but I think that is mostly a result of me writing what I want to read.
As the reason that I started writing was so there would be more stories of the type that I enjoyed floating around. This preferred style of mine also helps keep me motivated to keep writing as many of my stories end up being quite long.
This first chapter is actually the shortest chapter in this series.
I also understand that there is a concern if the diction I choose ends up being too clerical and not “rottingly” stimulating enough, but that is what I usually assess for while editing.
Not going into too much detail and boring you with the minutiae of why I write the way I write, it is because it is how I enjoy writing…and my word bank might have only gotten more developed since the year that I posted this first chapter.
Just wanted to be honest about that.
Regardless, thank you for giving my stories a chance and taking the time to type your opinion down.
The reforming plot device was actually something I thought up for the series a month before the original release of the games. (The idea of the series itself was thought up back in the summer of that year). It is one that I found myself enjoying as well, but I’m still looking forward to utilizing in future chapters. As, fifteen chapters in, I’m still waiting until certain other narratives develop before I further explore Florian’s reformation ability.
Of course, there are some other interesting abilities introduced, that are related to the games but entirely unique to this series, that could tide you over before that point is reached in the chapters after number 15.
Posted by Vede 1 month ago Report
Finally got around to starting this and what an opening chapter. I’m familiar with your more recent stories but even here your description and progression of a vore scene is second to none. A gripping journey of harrowing sensations with nothing held back in the cruel and violent description of the affair, from a painful swallowing for the sister to an even more torturous digestion for the brother~.
Looking forward to chipping away at more of this series over time.