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Adeleine's regressive trip back through a womb!

A little bonus thing I thought I'd include, as a continuation to this story:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/848999
(Admittedly, I'm more of an artist than a writer, so feel free to share any constructive criticism!!)

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wiseguy288

Posted by wiseguy288 2 years ago Report

Daww, that's super cute!

It looks fine to me. Honestly can't think of anything I'd change.

Vdiem

Posted by Vdiem 2 years ago Report

Nice a story!

pleasedonteatmealice28

Posted by pleasedonteatmealice28 2 years ago Report

Addie even could have a lil sis/bro in the future O.o

Groblek

Posted by Groblek 2 years ago Report

That’s a fun story to go with the comic! My only major criticism is that it would have been nice to stick with Roxy’s narration all the way through her rebirth. But I understand looking at a story idea and going “ugh, writing all that out would be a lot of work, can’t I just skip to the end?” (I have a few concepts in my files that are waiting for me to have the time/energy to actually write that sort of thing properly.)

passiveactive

Posted by passiveactive 2 years ago Report

ok!! ill defo keep that in mind for next time : o
thanks for the feedback!! : )

JessTheNerd

Posted by JessTheNerd 2 years ago Report

Well you're definitely becoming a new favourite of mine! Can't wait to see what else you do!

FudGuy

Posted by FudGuy 2 years ago Report

Lovely

liquidgrumps

Posted by liquidgrumps 2 years ago Report

This accompaniment POV story is so good! Please continue to do these for your work if you can, it makes them even more enjoyable.

Spider8Fiend

Posted by Spider8Fiend 2 years ago Report

This was a pretty fun story, all things considered. Sweet, short, and to the point. Given that Adeline’s mental state would only continue to deteriorate as she was rebirthed, keeping the story so focused let’s us enjoy the vibes without getting into the nitty gritty.

That said, it could be fun to see a full length story along this premise sometime, from seeing the future mother decide to unbirth & rebirth someone to an epilogue focusing on the reborn child.

anonymousbrowser

Posted by anonymousbrowser 1 year ago Report

The image linked in the description says "You do not have access to view this item".

Rubiont-47

Posted by Rubiont-47 1 year ago Report

Yeah. . .

FuturisticMan

Posted by FuturisticMan 1 year ago Report

The links don't work!!!

right2fail

Posted by right2fail 1 year ago Report

What happened to the image that goes with this, and the original story? Are you purging your gallery?

ceralboxforbrains

Posted by ceralboxforbrains 1 month ago Report

Ik this was like AWHILE ago but if you do see this PLEASE do something like this, it would be great i realllllly loved this type of thing