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A continuation of the snakey story from last month and its conclusion. May write more in this setting in the future as there's a lot I like about it.

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Typhlosionshadow

Posted by Typhlosionshadow 2 years ago Report

Another great story and Nice to see a sequel

DrakeZephyr

Posted by DrakeZephyr 2 years ago Report

Glad you liked it. I plan to do more with Coleus in time, she's a fun character for me.

Typhlosionshadow

Posted by Typhlosionshadow 2 years ago Report

I agree she seems like a cool character

sharky

Posted by sharky 2 years ago Report

Very nice, you always write such good stories. I would like to see this continue on as a new series

Kasra

Posted by Kasra 2 years ago Report

Very nice! Henry really just didn't get how it all works, did he? Cultural gaps are nasty things.

DrakeZephyr

Posted by DrakeZephyr 2 years ago Report

Indeed. Their tourist industry does what it can to brace visitors for the culture shock, but...

Kasra

Posted by Kasra 2 years ago Report

In defense of the preparation materials, Henry was being angry and bitter and not really paying attention.

ribs

Posted by ribs 2 years ago Report

so basically dragged your friend to a strangers's party and ditched him. do wish to have seen some of the weekend a build up to finish feels like I missed a part two

DrakeZephyr

Posted by DrakeZephyr 2 years ago Report

I did fret the weekend session was, the juicy part people would hope to see. I suppose in my mind this pair of stories was sort of an intro to the world, and the casualness of the experience to Coleus was what I was trying to capture. That said, I'm hoping in future stories with her to focus a bit more on what she gets up to at home

ribs

Posted by ribs 2 years ago Report

you did that with coleus, and Henry got a far bit of story arc but Charles we got the beginning and aftermath so it feel incomplete.