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Experimenting in the Bedroom By DreamEater -- Report

Once again, your girlfriend was pressuring you to work on developing your predatory abilities. However, this time, she might be getting more than she bargained for.

Thumbnail was made with Novel AI (I am not an artist nor pretend to be)


After receiving feedback on my last story, I switch up my writing process. This time I focused on adding visual details and descriptive dialogue between the characters.

Let me know what you think below. Each comment helps me refine my skills. ^_^

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TMVore

Posted by TMVore 2 years ago Report

You're a word artist though.

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 2 years ago Report

Thanks, I appreciate it ^_^

AnAccount

Posted by AnAccount 2 years ago Report

Silly Samantha! Didn't read enough on Eka's portal

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 2 years ago Report

A rookie mistake~

Summerleaves

Posted by Summerleaves 2 years ago Report

I normally prefer second person from the prey perspective, but this was pretty neat.

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 2 years ago Report

Thanks! I identify with preds heavily which leads me to unintentionally write from their perspective.

Summerleaves

Posted by Summerleaves 2 years ago Report

I don't mind, I also write from their perspective, but usually in third-person.

DreamEater

Posted by DreamEater 2 years ago Report

I've done some third person work here, but I always struggle to make things seem personal. I'll have to work on that.

Summerleaves

Posted by Summerleaves 2 years ago Report

Well, you probably know the best ways to get better are to read and to practice