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The mane six are about to foil another nascent plan of Sombra's, but this time the dark unicorn decides to deviate from the narrative script. Cooking and general nastiness ensues.
Thanks to Pozzo and Rathalos122 for the help with this one! Mind the tags, as always.
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Posted by Nebbie 2 years ago Report
Hmm, this is pretty good. I'd say my one issue with things is that only Pinkie was actually killed in front of Dash, all the others just die to Sombra without the others knowing, and so while the manners of death are varied, there isn't much for fetishy or general character dynamics.
I think had Twilight been smarter and noticed what he was doing to AJ, and just been...kinda alright with things from there, all the way to the chopping block (and that part was shown), it would've been great.
Posted by Stanku 2 years ago Report
Thanks! Sometimes I write more explicit scenes, but more often than not I prefer leaving a lot implicit; the effect can be just as powerful then too. It's a continuous experiment where to draw the line and when and how.