Posted by mazdab 2 years ago Report

I like it! Would love to see some kind of continuation or alternate bad end, where he got regressed. Good job!

Posted by kyeman 2 years ago Report

Same here, but... would ending with regression really be a "bad ending" at this point?

Posted by Destroyah23 2 years ago Report

Personally I would love to see a continuation of the story

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

I'll try to plan one out :)

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

Thank you! I think I could write a sequel for this one. Probably not with regression though.

Posted by Yumyum18 2 years ago Report

So hot!

And I'm glad Mommy Allie came around to the joys of being Mommy.

As always, loved the breastfeeding scenes and agree with the other reviews:

A sequel would be cool...

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

Thanks! Allie does make a great mommy. I'll add a sequel to my backlog. Once I'm feeling a straight mommy/unbirth story again I'll probably come back to it.

Posted by Apostolos 2 years ago Report

Well that was an unusual plot route, not bad but unusual

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

I'll take not bad :). Thanks for reading and commenting!

Posted by WolfbaneSoldier 2 years ago Report

It's unfortunate that the women are abusive, great writing though. I personally have an issue when in these things women are given god status and can do no wrong even kill or abuse the victim. they never receive concequences by introducing kind people to make them conflict towards there previous actions, for example I would still go the route of his moms idea being he go in her womb, but there is a sinisterness to this that is abuse, it would make sense if the mom got mad at her for making him cry if she noticed he nolonger cared, that would be powerful writing, instead, men are used for women. Like most story's.

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

I made the setting a 'women know best' world just to rationalize Jason having a babysitter. My goal was to have a mean pred be transformed by the hormones of pregnancy to a loving pred. So that's where I wanted the conflict/atonement to come from. Allie becoming a loving gf against her will. By the end I wanted Jason to be very confused by the sudden changes but into it. I might have fallen short on a few of these things if the story came across as straight abuse. I maybe could have made Jason more actively excited by the changes in the end rather than skeptical. Or maybe toned down the meanness of Allie. I just wanted her changes to be stark.

Anyway, thanks for reading and commenting. Hopefully some of my other stories are more up your alley.

Posted by UzumakiPredator 2 years ago Report

If you do a sequel, here's a prompt if you want to throw oral vore into the mix. Allie has a moment of self-reflection where she comes to see her previous behavior as unacceptable, and after coming to hate her past self, starts to see any woman that is just like how she used to be as a problem that needs solving. The solution she comes up with is eating them. She'll justify it to Jason by saying they deserved it for being raging bitches while secretly imagining it as her eating and eliminating who she used to be, thinking that doing so will finally get rid of the guilt she feels over her previous bad behavior. Jason will eventually come over to the idea of her eating "bitches" after they both come to enjoy the taste of female flesh (Jason, of course, will only get a second-hand taste through their umbilical connection).
Whether this prompt is a good one or not will probably depend on how women eating women is viewed in this 'woman knows best' world that you have crafted.

Posted by hyperxheadphones22 2 years ago Report

More situations where the unbirther feels the need to quickly put them back inside and not let them out are a rare find, this was great

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

Thanks! Glad you liked it.

Posted by UzumakiPredator 2 years ago Report

Looks like Allie got something resembling karma by unwittingly having her very personality changed as a consequence of her own actions. That brief sentence mentioning a sudden rage that vanished the second she noticed it sounds like the last dregs of her bitchy personality dying. On one hand, it is kind of terrifying in hindsight for someone's personality to so drastically change because of something that she lost control over. On the other hand, she brought it upon herself and it could be seen as karma. Further karma would be her new personality punishing her with guilt over her previous behavior.
I would not be surprised if the mother tricked her into doing this knowing that it would change her into a nicer person. Perhaps Jason will even get an apology in a sequel, though that would probably only happen after something she sees forces her to reflect on how she was in comparison to what she has become. Then she would react with disgust and shame over her previous bitchiness. After all, no self-respecting "Mommy" appreciates the thought of her "baby" being abused. With the thought of such a thing being done by her own hand falling under the category of "unthinkable".

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

Allie's transformation was definitely meant to be karma. While writing it, I was also of two minds on her personality change. But it was hot and she was a bitch so that justified it enough for me.

When it comes to Jason's mom, I was indeed trying to hint that she was planning for this to happen. She always wanted them to end up together.

At first I didn't want Allie to remember ever being a bitch to Jason and have her hormones wipe those memories. But now I think it would add some fun conflict. Remembering how she used to act could cause her to really spoil Jason because of her guilt.

I like your idea of having her guilt also drive her to eat some other women. I had originally planned to add some oral vore to this one but felt it had enough going on. I figure in this world, women eat whoever they want. Men are just preferable and far easier to catch. So Allie could go on a bit of a spree of eating girls who were mean to Jason.

Thanks for reading and leaving two such detailed comments! I'll definitely comeback to them when I return to this story for a continuation.

Posted by Fortheloveoflarge 2 years ago Report

I read this when you first published it but didn't comment because I didn't know what to say. I figured it out! This is the first vore story I have read where the preds actions clearly change them mentally and I think that is really cool! This story and quite honestly all of your stories are very good and all have enjoyable characters.

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

I'm glad you liked it enough to come back and comment. The concept was really fun to write and I hope I can come up with a similarly interesting way for a pred to "fall for" a prey.

And thanks for the compliments! They really are motivating. I need to find some time to finish up a few more stories.

Posted by Dragr 2 years ago Report

An amazing story as always! Unbirth 7s not my favorite subject, but nonetheless it was an interesting read. When the next story will come?

Posted by Mucsf95 2 years ago Report

Thank you! Glad it kept your interest despite not being entirely up your alley. Life's been real busy but I've been chipping away at a few stories. Hopefully I'll be able to post some in May.