Posted by Sauvegarde 1 year ago Report

Well damn, this is clean o.o

Posted by Sehnsucht 1 year ago Report

Thank you so much ^^ I've just reread and it's delirious. These pieces get written in one sitting and are minimally edited.

I really appreciate all your comments :) Will tonight go through them---I've been on Eka's less but haven't forgot you.

Posted by Sauvegarde 1 year ago Report

Delirious? Maybe. But your metaphors work well at setting the atmosphere. I enjoyed how you dropped me in media res with minimal context, and it still made sense to me.

One part I'm not sure about is this:

"Somewhere just above the base of your pelvis you feel her form soften and melt like sugarcubes in hot water."

Does this mean the first prey is melting in my prostate before it feeds my balls?

Posted by Sehnsucht 1 year ago Report

Precisely so :) This is something of a callback to a conversation with Raven ages ago, where we discussed digestion in CV and tried to find ways around the image of one massive testicle. It led to the following cute short of hers, btw: https://aryion.com/g4/view/797229

How did you find the second-person schtick? I've been slow to post stories in this format because I never used to like reading them, but have grown to love second-person over time.

Posted by Sauvegarde 1 year ago Report

Well, this is hot, I agree with your conclusion!

I offered this interpretation once in the FightFuckFeed discord, and I was sternly told by the concerned party that prey indeed digest in the balls ^^'

To each pred their own, I suppose. I can picture having a tiny hanging in your sack and slowly losing form as you walk as something desirable too. Put a second one inside, this way you've got two massive testicles. There, problem solved. Boys need more daily carbs anyway, or so I heard.

As for the second-person writing, it became second nature to me. It comes from roleplaying writing conventions, the literary equivalent to standard issue protagonists in doujins with their hair eternally covering their eyes. It's supposed to better integrate you, the reader, into the story. You don't identify with "I" as much as you identify with "you". Frankly this is a bit disingenuous to use it in a text with no interaction, but I'll be the last person to criticize you for it.

For one thing I use it in most my stories.

For another thing, I genuinely like it.

And thirdly, I believe it can add relatability to the story. I always try to paint my "you" protagonists in a way I imagine my average reader would think or act, sometimes with a suggested background or specific aspirations. Most of them are prey because the majority of vorarephiles identify as such :p

Personally I don't. So, when you open with "it took the best part of two weeks to make them yours," I'm like, yeah, I don't know whom I'm eating, but it's long overdue!

Posted by Sehnsucht 1 year ago Report

Problems arise if the tinies are in cahoots. Can you imagine how embarrassing it would be to stand in line at the post office while your two occupants push against one another, causing your balls to knock together like maracas? Death would be too good for them.

Interested to hear that second-person is your RP enclave's bread and butter. I grew up in third. Swings and roundabouts, but I must say, second is far, far more personal. Thank you for your thoughts on the matter, btw. As it happens, immediately after I asked the questions I discovered an entire folder in your gallery dedicated to the word "you", so I thought you might be pro-second after all :)

Posted by Sauvegarde 1 year ago Report

Testicles are specifically engineered to withstand constant friction and bumps when you run. Male preds will be fine ;)

Regarding narration, I grew up in third too. Everybody was taught classic literacy in school. Past tense, external narrator, subject verb complement. I was lucky enough to have a truly good teacher in school who went beyond that, but that's it.

I only awakened my urge to write when I read The Erogamer a few years back (here is an epub in case you don't want to create an account at QQ). Don't let the title fool you, there is more depth in that story than anybody expects at first glance. Nothing ever so deeply resonated with me. So yeah, this is the one. My muse. I had erogaming conventions in mind at all times when I started roleplaying. It still influences my writing today, the same way a backbone influences my gait.

Hence the 'you' convention in my Random Encounters. All these stories are retelling of ERP sessions I've played, and I tried to preserve that flavour.