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Hello everyone !
Today's upload is a shorter story I had the idea for a little while ago while half-asleep, and I wanted to write something lighter using it. Not too displeased with how it turned out, but I'm not against coming back to it and developing it one of these days.
Will be trying to focus on the pred PoV for the next story, with what I hope is an original setting, so hopefully it'll be a good one as well!
Thanks for listening to my silly rambling, and have a nice read !
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Posted by TMVore 1 year ago Report
I don't think there is much more delicious than reading a story from you ♡
Posted by BunnyLily 1 year ago Report
Thanks, glad you like them !
Posted by TheWildeWood 1 year ago Report
Cute little casual story Lily~
Posted by BunnyLily 1 year ago Report
Thanks ^^
Posted by Blonner 1 year ago Report
Ahahahahahahaah! Fantastic! IRL this can be a kidnapping and killing, in the dolcett world is only a "nice favor" :D *hug you* a lovable tasty story! Yummy yummy, i think you are obbedient,tasty and tender too rigth? See ya later Lily ;)
Posted by BunnyLily 1 year ago Report
Thanks !
Posted by Nom1 1 year ago Report
The whole premise of the prey being essentially kidnapped off the street but then going shopping and coming back was odd and a little off putting to me. Obviously too much logical explanation doesn't really fit here but I think that could have been done a little better. Maybe Nora is Miss Dentley's intern or her niece/daughter depending on your preferences, even her neighbor. You can still work in all the other aspects of the story including shopping and the tie in with school but in a way that fits together rather than seeming so contrived. Overall it was a nice story though, thank you!
Posted by BunnyLily 1 year ago Report
Yeah, to be honest it was mostly jotting down the idea I had so that I wouldn't forget it, and maybe be motivated to develop it one day. I know it's not really good, but I still wanted it out, and maybe people can say whether they like the parts as well
Posted by KuroNekoChan 1 year ago Report
I think you story was neat, a little rushed but nice to read, keep doing great works friend ^w^
Posted by BunnyLily 1 year ago Report
Yeah, I rushed the end a bit because I wanted it out so I could move on ^^'
Posted by Nom1 1 year ago Report
Wasn't knocking the story, just that aspect of it. It's still a good story, just for me personally that bit doesn't work.
Posted by cheerfulchef 1 year ago Report
Nora might be my all-time favorite submissive character. There is something alluring about how she is not quite self aware of how subby she is--it's delightfully casual and natural. Genius!