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Alison and Kim decide to have some fun at the county fair when an opportunity presents itself...however, will their actions at Sarah's Party catch up to them? The shrinky they've spotted might not be the only one in danger...
So I did a poll a while back about which of my stand alone stories you guys would most like to see a sequel to, and Emma's First Party was the clear winner, so here it is!
This was weird but fun to write because Emma's First Party was always supposed to be a stand alone story, so I really didn't have any idea where the story was going. But I suppose Worth A Shot chapter 1 was the same way, so who knows, maybe there'll be many more of these to come...
Related to that, I don't really know what the structure of this greater story is going forward. Is it a slowburn revenge story for Chloe? Or is it more like Wil E. Coyote and Roadrunner where Alison and Kim always manage to get one over on her with their antics? Is there one of those that sounds better to you?
Also, for the first time I've got an accompanying AI comic that I'll be posting right after this on the forums in the usual thread. This was something I kind of made by accident, but I like how it turned out. It loosely follows the events of the story, so you can either use it as a visual reference while reading or look at it after finishing the story, your choice. I guess it contains mild spoilers? But not really anything that the title wouldn't spoil for you already, lol.
Anyway, as always, let me know what you think! Your comments and thoughts are my motivation to post.
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Posted by amerdism 1 year ago Report
Damn, I was hoping for some justice.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
MAYBE in the next part...haven't decided yet. Even I don't know where the story is going!
Posted by zargein 9 months ago Report
Same... poor girl.
Posted by VortexFoodsTM 1 year ago Report
What a great story from you again! The part with Abby just falling straight into Kim's drink had me laughing out loud. I just love your writing style; the characters feel so realistic and your stories are a delightful mix of vore horror and absurd humor like that particular bit.
It was also interesting to see that the events of the last story were picked up again here. And the resolution (at least for now) was delightfully unfair too! :D Really a great piece of writing once more, you never disapppoint!
Regarding your question how to continue with this... personally, I prefer the dynamics in vore stories to be unfair, so I'm definitely biased towards Chloe not getting any kind of lasting revenge on Alison. But I also genuinely think the "Wil E. Coyote and Roadrunner" dynamic would make for some fun sequels, and fit really well with the humor in your stories. So that option would definitely have my vote!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yeah, if I were to sit down and write it right now, that's probably the direction I would go with it, just knowing my own preferences.
But I really truly don't know yet. I never planned to do a sequel to Emma's story until someone in the comments expressed interest in what would happen next if Chloe found out who ate her, and that just really got the wheels spinning for me.
So with any luck I'll be inspired by someone's idea in the comments again!
Posted by muslone 1 year ago Report
Another great story as always. It is understandable how Chloe reacts to losing her best fiend and her guilty feelings. Her driving to find the devourer is a dynamic you have done well in writing. Alison and Kim's carefree and careless attitude brings their characters out and makes you wonder just how they would react if someone they knew closely caught the shrinking virus?
As I was writing this a thought came to me that how wrong and twisted it would be if Chloe caught the shrinking virus and was discovered by Alison.
Looking forward to more of your stories as they are always intriguing.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
That's an interesting question about how Alison or Kim would react to someone they know getting shrunk, and I'm honestly not sure. Despite their carefree attitude, I think it would actually humanize shrinkies in their eyes a bit and might actually make them feel guilt over what they've done to their respective preys, at least if the shrunken person was someone they were fond of.
Usually in my stories the characters who are most sympathetic to shrinkies are those who were friends with someone who eventually caught the virus. It creates a level of empathy that the preds of these tales don't have the frame of reference for.
Posted by blab123 1 year ago Report
Alison does make a good point, how can Chloe prove she did it? Guess Chloe will have to take the law into her own hands…
A great read as always! Kim taking her time to taste Abby was really good, I almost feel bad that she was cut short by that employee. Almost.
Posted by blab123 1 year ago Report
Oh, and regarding the structure moving forward, I think a slow burn would fit your style of writing better, but if you want to experiment with a Will-E Coyote style structure, by all means go for it!
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Yeah, I'm think no matter what in the next part, Chloe is definitely going to escalate things. In her eyes society has failed her twice, so I think she might have a bit of a Joker moment...
Posted by Razorwind1 1 year ago Report
Great story. Kinda agree that it would be nice for a tiny to FINALLY get some form of justice. If not going down for murder then a violent ass beating equivalent to what they put their prey to. Ill like whatever you make though.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
That would have to be QUITE as ass beating to be equivalent to what the prey go through...
But we'll have to see. I think the most challenging part about taking that route is I'd have to figure out how to make a justice ending erotic, which is tricky for me because so much of the appeal of these kinds of stories for myself is the naughtiness of bad girls getting away with doing bad things...
Posted by Nalzindar 1 year ago Report
I haven't read a good story for quite some time and then I find you posting a sequel to the story I enjoyed the most last year, thanks you :D
I love this sequel as much as I did with Emma's first party, and you didn't let go of the originality here either. For example was the part where Abby fell out of the sky into Kim's drink, promting the girl to say she just became religious, was hilarious XD
And the drama was also excellent, not to mention the vore part.
I find it refreshing in reading about Chloe hell bent on revenging Emma's death, and I like the dynamic between Alison, Kim and Chloe. I hope you will write more and give poor Chloe a proper plan on how to catch the girls, maybe trick Alison and Kim into confessing or prove what they are doing. It would be fun to see a story where those who illegally eat other people actually are brought to justice since that rarely is a topic in vore stories.
And the comic you made was also fantastic, loved it : )
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
Glad you enjoyed it, since it was your comment last time that inspired me to write this story!
Posted by Nalzindar 1 year ago Report
Then I must thank you again if it was my comment that inspired you. You have a creative mind to be able to come up with such good stories, which it is truly admirable, you are also very good with finding the best words and build up the situations for the scenes : )
Though, if you ever would like a suggestion for some kind of ending/solution to this, I got a few ideas based on what what to do while at the same time keep it within the spirit of your characters. But then again, I'm perfectly confident that you can come up with even better ideas yourself.
Posted by TinyHunter 1 year ago Report
I'm always down to hear ideas! I just can't promise I'll use them, ultimately like you said I do my own thing.