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A short and simple piece, a girl is doing poorly on a test, her friend forgot to eat breakfast... you can probably guess what happens next. Not that you need to guess! This thing is, like, thirteen hundred words. Easy read.
I was chatting with someone on the site (they can probably guess who they are) and ended up looking through my old paper writing... sure, most of it's bad, but there's bits of good stuff in there. Like this! Which I spent a chunk of my day off transcribing and editing to share with you all!
As always, feel free to comment, or point out if I missed anything in editing. I tidy my stuff up, but me and spellcheck don't catch everything.... also, no idea how to tag this digestion, it's not quite my usual/current style...
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Posted by FluffV 1 year ago Report
It was cute seeing the story from the prey’s perspective and how she didn’t want to cause Gave any trouble as his food.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
It's fun to imagine things from the prey's perspective every now and then, even if I'd prefer being the person doing the eating. She was good friend to the end :)
Posted by Yumyum18 1 year ago Report
Nothing yummier than a good friend
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Except, of course, multiple good friends...
Posted by TheFattyMirror03 1 year ago Report
Imagine to be with all your friends on a Sleepover, doing some eat games lol
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Living the dream XD
Posted by Yumyum18 1 year ago Report
The winner is...the one who eats them all
Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
Sleepovers are a great setting for a vore story.
Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
I really like vore set in a school for some reason. I also like how casual Abby is about offering herself as a meal to Gabe. Since Abby said that her grades might send her down a throat, I assume that she is choosing her stomach, while helping her friend Gabe, since he needs food so badly. While I like it when a pred savors his prey, it makes sense for Gabe to be in a hurry to swallow Abby. Maybe Gabe should have had Abby strip before eating her, since her clothes might affect digestion, but his stomach was able to handle her clothes without trouble. If Abby stripped her clothes off before letting Gabe swallow her, a teacher might complain about her breaking the dress code.
I also like the quote "See you on the other side." I would have preferred that Gabe get to enjoy Abby, but it makes sense that he wouldn't get to, because he was pressed for time. The part where the teacher says that they lost a few students over break shows how casual vore is. I like how normalized it is, and how Gabe isn't getting in trouble for killing Abby with his stomach.
Another random thought I have, is that it takes awhile for Abby to start breaking down, so her nutrients are not helping Gabe during the test, but she is filling his stomach and making it happy.
I enjoyed this story. Even tho it is short, it is good, and keeps me anticipating more of your writing.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Always happy to get such a positive review ^^
I debated changing the story when I was transcribing it to have Abby strip down, but honestly I was worried that if she did some other opportunistic pred might snap her up before Gabe could... though that could've been it's own sort of interesting story. Dress code seemed less of a concern for a student that would shortly not be a student anymore... honestly, in a casual vore world, I feel like there'd be a fair few students that would rather gurgle than take another test, so they might just be used to it.
Prey that knows they're going to end up eaten, and is just choosing their stomach is a fun setting :)
Posted by Randomdude5 1 year ago Report
If Abby was stripping in front of Gabe, and he is waiting for her to get all her clothes off, he would be mad if another pred grabbed her and started swallowing her. Since Gabe is so hungry, he would get mad at the other pred for stealing his food, and eating Abby without her permission right in front of him, when she promised to be his meal. That would be a setup for a fight. Maybe Gabe could eat the other pred, or maybe it would be a 2 on 1 fight where Abby helps him. I don't think another pred would try to eat Abby if Gabe is standing right there watching her take her clothes off, unless that pred has a power advantage like being a teacher, or a school bully with his friends helping him.
While I think that having Abby strip before Gabe eats her would be easier on his stomach, it would probably make Gabe horny from watching her strip, and seeing her naked, or just in her underwear.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
Thinking back... it having been quite a while since I wrote this, the sexuality of her stripping might have been part of it, yeah. The story is more platonic than romantic/sexual, and having her naked would certainly have changed that.
Posted by xvx17 1 year ago Report
I like that she feels like just food, she values herself so little that she can give herself and be a simple lunch.
Posted by PaperWriter 1 year ago Report
I mean, I was thinking of it less as her not valuing her own life, more that she figures she's going to end up eaten and might as well go out helping a friend, but I like that interpretation too