The Girl Opposite
Jack
knelt on the cold and dusty floor outside the bathroom, the sound of
the water flowing drowning out the sound of his breathing. Through
the small gap at the bottom of the door frame, where the wood had
become warped from years of moisture; he saw the girl who lived
opposite. She was changing. Her clothes fell to the ground, following
the contours of her back, only slowing momentarily as they caught on
the gradient of her buttocks before falling to a crumpled pile of
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Uploaded: 12 years ago
Owner: Antiso
Tags: Soft Vore Unbirth F/M Magic Insertion Vaginal vore Shrunken man
Just a short vore story involving a shrunken man and a mysterious middle eastern witch.
Antiso - 12 years ago
Thanks! I've enjoyed your stories for a while so it means alot to hear that from you!
4ofSwords - 12 years ago
A lovely story! At the end, did something magical happen to him, or did he just change from "Please don't kill me!" to "I would die for your happiness" of his own accord?
Also - pointless pedanticism, but it's the only kind of pedantic I get to be: I assume the latin she invoked was meant to be small man? In the vocative, that should be parve vir (or vir parve - or maybe, in this case, vire parve).
Alright, I just consigned myself to commenter hell, but I enjoyed the story all the same!
French_snack - 12 years ago
I'm always very pleased to see a good new writer join the Portal; welcome indeed! :)
Well-paced, well-written, atmospheric and with sufficient descriptions and context to make it an enjoyable narrative the reader can really get into. The mystery around the girl is nicely done, a touch chilling, though Jack's infatuation and acceptance softens it into something peaceful and relaxing.
Antiso - 12 years ago
Yeah, it was kind of meant to be an enchantment.
And the latin error! Thanks for pointing that out! I'll edit it when I get the chance!