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The teleporter - boon to womankind By WNEC -- Report

Wordcount: 3302

This story was originally a lot longer (Like 5 pages longer) as I had written a much bigger conclusion, but I felt like that was all stuff people wouldn't care about so I made the ending a lot shorter.

To summarize my initial plan a bit:

1. wrote about Veronica talking to her co-conspirator, a character that I also had to introduce (I might make an own story for her some other day though)
2. wrote a small backstory for Veronica
3. wrote about what had happened to humanity following the extinction of men
4. Got into detail about the disappearance of orange juice
5. And I made a scat scene
I wasn't able to write all of this in a satisfying way so I took the easy way out and scrapped it all.

edit: I uploaded the follow up, it's a little incomplete though https://aryion.com/g4/view/1005503

Anyway, I was unsure about a lot of things writing this so if you read through the whole thing I would love to hear what you think! Whether you liked or disliked what you read I would welcome the criticism so that I can hope to do better next time.

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Emeryx117

Posted by Emeryx117 1 year ago Report

hajdhg, god, male extinction gets me so hard for some reason

WNEC

Posted by WNEC 1 year ago Report

I know, it's the best thing since sliced bread!
Thank you for feedback!

Cynder13

Posted by Cynder13 11 months ago Report

Amazing story can we see the extended ending sounds good as well?

WNEC

Posted by WNEC 11 months ago Report

Sure. I can upload it on my profile, I was going to be rewriting that thing and uploading it as a follow up to this story at one point anyway. However I can upload it as incomplete, I will need some time to proofread and perhaps edit it a bit though so maybe I'll upload it tomorrow.

Cynder13

Posted by Cynder13 11 months ago Report

So how would it be a follow up since the story ended with extinction?

WNEC

Posted by WNEC 11 months ago Report

The bullet points I mentioned in the description describe that. There wouldn't be any people getting eaten in the follow up.

WNEC

Posted by WNEC 11 months ago Report

I have uploaded the follow up now. Here it is:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/1005503