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Hi. The events of this story takes place directly after this story: https://aryion.com/g4/view/1001943
You should really read that one before reading this, or you will be very confused.
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I mentioned it in the description of the previous story, but this was originally meant to be a part of this story's first part, but I didn't manage to make a satisfying conclusion so I ended up scrapping all of this and making a much shorter ending.
That is still the case here, I am not satisfied with the conclusion and the story ends very abruptly. The only reason I am uploading this in the first place was because someone commented on part 1 that they wanted to see it. I was always planning to upload part 2 one day after I got better at writing anyway, so now's as good a time as any to try and learn something.
There is a lot of information in this extended ending here, it has worldbuilding and introduces a new character who is supposed to be an important part of the lore of the typical setting behind most of the stories I have written. And honestly I do believe that my abilities as a writer right now is lacking in the sense of communicating all of these important stuff, The things I wrote in this story did not quite have the same impact as I would have liked and proofreading this thing was very hard and really let it sink in that my abilities as a writer is lacking.
The ending is half assed, but every time I go back to try and rewrite the thing I end up feeling like I need to expand it way further, and I really don't have the patience any longer, so it is what it is.
I still might come back and rewrite the story in the future once I get better at this, as was my initial plan.
But that aside, hopefully I was able to use the correct dirty words required to make the text pleasant enough to read. Hope you enjoy!
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Posted by Cynder13 11 months ago Report
So here are my thoughts i can see why you didn’t put it in the other story since this feels more like part 2 aside from that thought I really liked it I like the characters and what we found out how there could be more Male Prey since they went extinct in the last story
Andi think your being too hard on yourself I thought this was good and I hope we get to see more of Veronica and Melinda in your stories
Posted by WNEC 11 months ago Report
I guess I was being a little overly negative in the description. I am proud of what I wrote here, especially what I had in the beginning, if only the story had a better ending then it would have been a pretty solid story honestly, on par with the first part even.
I am glad you liked it and thanks for feedback ^^
Posted by Cynder13 11 months ago Report
So what plans do you have for Veronica and Melinda will they lead conquest on other worlds?
Posted by WNEC 11 months ago Report
I don't have any plans to work on anything with these two characters right now.
This story was just meant to be it's own thing actually. With men becoming extinct that does make the story quite conclusive already. Men could be brought back, but I don't have any plans to write any story where that does happen currently.
I was planning to give Melinda her own story, and when I do that, it will probably be a story that takes place before the events of this story, but I don't currently have any ideas regarding that story, I'll come up with something at one point probably. As for Veronica I had no plans to use her again for the moment, though if Melinda gets a story she will probably not go unmentioned, they are good friends and Veronica is Melinda's servant after all.
Now I have had many ideas like wanting to create worldbuilding and connect the worlds of some of the characters I have from my other stories with the world of Melinda and Veronica to make one big world that will serve as the standard setting for my stories. I also have stories that I have written that I gave up on, maybe I'll revisit them and see if I can make something of them as well.
I am not really working on any stories right now, the only plan I have is that I am going to be taking a little break. I mainly write these stories when I want to practise writing and I don't want this website to become too big a part of my life because I have stuff to do in real life that takes priority.
I have lot's of ideas, but no plan to see any of them completed. I'll write when I want to write, and I'll do other things when I want to do other things.