Just one thing, I don't think that Tia would become a faded memory. You did a lot to show they had a long history together. The memory of her death would haunt Jack for life...
Indeed. Interesting though, I received a "B" on this story. I didn't like the ending, as I was rushed into completing it. You're right though, someone who has had so much connection growing up, would not have forgotten her.
Posted by Jacquelope 15 years ago Report
Just one thing, I don't think that Tia would become a faded memory. You did a lot to show they had a long history together. The memory of her death would haunt Jack for life...
Posted by Gentle_Grounds 15 years ago Report
True. But I could only write so many words as a requirement for a class.
Posted by French_snack 15 years ago Report
The "faded memory" bit jarred at me too, to be honest. It seemed out of place, especially as a conclusion to the rest. Other than that, good scene.
Posted by Gentle_Grounds 15 years ago Report
Indeed. Interesting though, I received a "B" on this story. I didn't like the ending, as I was rushed into completing it. You're right though, someone who has had so much connection growing up, would not have forgotten her.