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After a young female astronaut is blown into deep space by an accident she begins to have what she thinks is talks with herself, thinking she has lost her mind from terror. Instead a lonely living ship offers her a hope at a new life.
This was inspired by a new character concept I had for a mecha character for the chat. It was by far the hardest thing I have ever written.
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Posted by Dragga 14 years ago Report
My, that was...that was wonderful. Well written, and the final note was quite a lovely touch. You handled the story well, regardless of how hard it may have been to write.
You have quite the skill with words~
Posted by Imrhys 14 years ago Report
Thank you, and that final note was something that just felt right when I wrote it up one day off a five minute inspiration.
And I have more skills with editing then writing, lol. *inside joke within the writing group >_> *
Posted by Darian 14 years ago Report
It's almost not a vore story at all...
this is very impressive. There was a kind of haunting quality to it, almost ghostlike. I like it.
Posted by Imrhys 14 years ago Report
Yes, I have noticed my treads towards writing on the edge unconventional pieces. It is time I write something directly vorish and very much so fatal ^^
And that haunting quality was something I was going for. You should have heard the music I had in prolonged, continuous loop while I worked on this.
Posted by Darian 14 years ago Report
Noo! I LIKE the gentle stuff! There's a ton of fatal stuff out already. It's kind of a turn off for me. (I have an instinctive "If it wants to eat you fight back and kill it" reaction that comes from many years of gaming). I guess the simple Predator/Prey interaction is limiting: The predator is pretty much mastruabating with a meal and the prey is just terrified/dying. Keeping the prey alive allows for longer interaction and more connection between the two. (Willing or nice isn't nessesary though, dominance and control is a big part of vore to me.)
Still, if you're writing it, it should be interesting!
And what was the name of the music you listened to while writing? I write like that too! I'd love to hear it, it's like a soundtrack!
Posted by AndromedaReject 14 years ago Report
>_> If someone hadn't spazzed on me, I'd have read it sooner.
Posted by Ilksurthysys 14 years ago Report
Um, wow.
Posted by ichbinich 14 years ago Report
Better than Event Horizon...A LOT better than Event Horizon.
Posted by Imrhys 14 years ago Report
Since I have avoided that movie because of how much friends said it... well... sucked... I'll take this as a major compliment. Thank you ^^
Posted by ichbinich 14 years ago Report
Well I liked the story a lot :3
I'm intrigued by the concept of sentient and/or organic ships, like Moya from Farscape or LEXX, and I'm also a fan of Mental/Soul Vore.
Eh, about Event Horizon...It's just that your story slightly reminded me of it...A spaceship comes in contact with an alien entity, acquires sentience and starts possessing people...or something like that...It's a weird movie .__.
Posted by Llyander 14 years ago Report
Lovely story, very sweet and melancholy, really enjoyed it.
I'd suggest you perhaps give it another revision though, some of the language is a little clunky in places, you're using a few too many words when really the reader is more than able to fill in the blanks, so to speak.
Really that was my only complaint about it. Great work, look forward to reading more from you.
Posted by Imrhys 14 years ago Report
My thoughts mirroring yours is why it was submitted to the monthly writing group http://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=38&' target='_blank'>http://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=38&;t=25581 so it could get a second pair of eyes and then be revised into a second draft then perhaps even polished beyond even that.
I'm more enjoying all the positive feedback it has gotten even at this stage of the writing. Thank you