Posted by Anashi 13 years ago Report

I love the story. ^^ I look forward to reading more.

Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report

Thanks Anashi! I am looking forward to writing it as well. If you have any suggestions, that would be great. For example, I am still debating whether or not Liza is actually pissed off enough to eat Mariska, or not.

Posted by Morphy 13 years ago Report

Lets hope she gets some fingers free to jam in her throat and gag that ring back up before she's squished... :)

(I wouldn't mind seeing more of the dragon's stretchy talents too, heh heh)

Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report

Well, Liza has a special trick up her sleeve for that :) Of course she doesn't realize it yet.

Also, more of her stretchy talents? What in particular were you thinking? If you have a suggestion I would love to hear it in a Private Message. I am always looking for ways to add unique erotic twists to the story :)

Posted by thisthend 13 years ago Report

I thought this chapter was really something (not that your previous efforts weren't amazing). I particularly loved the sense of dread you were able to weave with Mariska's tale was great; to make it simultaneously arousing and horrific really was masterful.

The two new characters you introduced are very enjoyable: Miss Blue's cruel, calculating, and oh so sensual personality makes her a very nice villain of the story; while the meek, traumatized, yet extremely dangerous Mariska provides a nice contrast to Miss B, while being completely compatible in being her trustworthy minion. That you were also able to make Mariska both sympathetic and detestable, makes her a very complex and three dimensional character; the fact you were able to seemingly pull this off so effortlessly speaks of your skill as a writer.

I have a question though: is Ms. Blue losing her marbles (possibly due to the side effects of using dangerous magics) when she forgets Mariska's title as her personal chef, or is it simply to emphasize her immense narcissism?

In summary: it's fucking amazing. Thank you for sharing.

Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report

Thanks man!

I appreciate your comment about the mouse. I am very glad my descriptions worked! One of my favorite types of character is the one whom people have equal reason to like and to hate. It provides a nice tension in the story, because you know they can choose a good and evil action, and the reader can make his or her own judgment about whether they are redeemable. I am debating whether Liza is actually mad enough to eat her up; it's not a poll but I'd be interested to hear your argument.

Second; you are correct; I had some difficulty establishing the character of the dragoness. The idea is that she is very narcissistic and she finds it so easy to enslave others (particularly mice since they are so easily frightened) that she does not need to pay much attention to which of them is doing what. Dragons are very rare and strong in this universe. I will reinforce all these points in the next chapter.

Anyway, I am honored by your comments, thistheend! :) Thank you so much for reading and commenting.

Posted by thisthend 13 years ago Report

I wouldn't go that far as to be honored by my lame ramblings, but thank you none the less for your kind words and reply.

And sure, I'll take you up on your offer and give you my thoughts on whether Liza should or shouldn't eat Mariska (but I'd prefer it to do it via PM so I don't clog up your comment section*.)

*I r shy. ;

Posted by Sora 13 years ago Report

Im just in aw of you Indighost. Y

Your stories have such erotic depth to them, they are such a pleasure to read.

I patiently await your future work!

Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report

Thank you for reading, Sora, you are kind. :) I will spend this week's free time working on my less erotic novel but I doubt I'll be able to stay away from this storyline for long. Your comments are always well appreciated. :)

Posted by ElPortero 13 years ago Report

Never has a "To Be Continued" been so cruel!! Another AMAZING story here! I have to say that my favorite part was the description of her translucent belly, showing the organs within. One of the single best moments in all my years of fetish reading.

Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report

:) Thanks ElPortero! I know, I found myself returning to that scene, I rather enjoyed it. Perhaps I'll add another similar scene later on, with Mary Jane spying on what's becoming of Blue's dinner.

Posted by ElPortero 13 years ago Report

Hell. Yes.

Posted by coaster14 13 years ago Report

wow ,awesome story

very dynamic and with details in all the right places

keep up the awesome work

Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report

Thanks, man! I certainly will, in my porn-allocated free time :)