"Oh, it was simply divine, thank you for asking Sweetiebelle," Rarity said in a chipper tone.
"Oh, well, that sounds lovely. Hay, while you're here, can you help me with something?" Sweetiebelle said in response.
"It began when I woke up this morning and checked our mailbox," Rarity continued.
"Um, that'd ok, Rare, I just need some help for a sec and-"
"And, to my pleasant surprise, what should I find in the mailbox? A letter from Fancy Pants himself!" Rarity squealed.
"Wait, I thought you already knew him as a friend or something," Sweetiebelle piped confused.
"Well, this is different. Now that he knows me as a simpleton pony, it means he clearly cares for me," Rarity swooned.
"...Right," Sweetiebelle said "anyway, I could really use your weight right he-"
"Why, he cares for me so much, that he invited me to a private dinner party!"
"Rarity, please, can you just-"
"There was half a score of the most high classed ponies I've ever heard of."
"Rarity, I-"
"And Fancy Pants looked absolutely ravishing.~"
Sweetiebelle sighed. "What happened?" she asked in a fake, yet over-the-top curious voice.
"Well, we talked about politics of course. That is, until it was time for the main course. When the waiter asked us what we wanted , do you know what I told him?"
"No, what did you tell him?" Sweetiebelle asked in a monotone voice.
Rarity snickered for a moment "I told him, in a joking manner of course, 'Oh, yes, I'll take the young stallion over there'!"
Sweetiebelle rolled her eyes.
"But, that's not the funny part! The waiter then told me 'Fine choice, Ms. Rarity, I'll summon him at once.' Then, after he left, Fancy Pants told me 'He is quite a fine specimen. You certainly have an eye for physique.' I nearly gasped out right! 'Oh, don't pretend you haven't been eyeing him all night,' he told me. So then I said 'Well, he is a nice looking stallion after all,' and then he told me "Indeed. If you hadn't come along, I might have snatched him up myself' to which I would have gasp had I not heard shouting.
"'That's absurd,' I heard him shout, then a few moments later I could hear 'I don't care if she's the queen of Englen! You cannot force this upon a pony!' Then, a couple of brutish guards swooped down and seized the stallion then forcefully brought them to where I sat! I was asked if he was the stallion I meant, and I said yes, to which they dumped him on the ground at my hooves and began tying him up.
"I was most certainly frightened, though intrigued by this turn of events. Certainly a joke that turned into something of a criminal charge...I'm still dazed at how quickly things changed. Had I known what kind of a party this was, I would have brought along a different dress. But it's no matter now. The point is I was presently surprised...hm hm...
"Anyway, I was still agape in shock when Fancy Pants asked me what I was waiting for. I corrected my composure, then told him something off the top of my head, perhaps something like, 'he's bigger than I thought' or 'I was just admiring his clean coat,' something like that. Of course I knew what was going to be expected of me. After all, after I saw one of the ponies in the back with a beautiful mare disappearing down his throat, I should have guessed I would be expected to do the same, or at least have the same done to me.
"'O-of course,' I told him 'I can't just eat him without a little dressing. Perhaps you should send the waiter to bring some.' I expected that this would give the poor stallion a little more time, though in hind sight, I'm not certain how he would have escaped. Perhaps he could have used the element of surprise, but I digress. It, unfortunately, did not work. It seemed that all waiters are to bare with them an assortment of condiments whilst on the clock.
"I finally decided to have him presented with a dash of paprika from Spane and a smattering of freshly grounded sea salt from the shores of Porta Caballo. I figured that the specifics would be a deal breaker, but it is Canterlot, and Canterlot does have EVERYTHING.
"So, I had not other option. I had to swallow down this poor fellow, or become lunch myself. I swallowed my pried, and knelt down to the stallion. I grabbed his head with my hooves and stared into his eyes, struck with fear...and surrender. I must admit, my heart was racing, not because I was afraid, but of how thrilling the experience was. I was a hungry predator, about to consume her meal. It was a moment I had been waiting for.
"Slowly, I opened my mouth, then slid my lips over hid muzzle. His musky sent and taste were absolutely wondrous. My words could hardly describe it. I lathered his fur with my saliva as I tried to taste every inch of his perfect face. I was in ecstasy.
"Then, I swallowed deeply, hungry to taste more of his body...but he got stuck. Heh, only when his muzzle touched the back of my throat did I remember that I can't eat large things like Pinkie can, I had no idea what I was doing. I was choking and running out of time.
"Luckily, I had a trick up my sleeve. I widened my mouth once more to let him slide off my tongue, and said that I am just far too full to eat another pony tonight (though I added how wonderful he tasted). Fancy Pants understood, thankfully, and told me that I was missing out on a devine meal.
"Then he said that he didn't want him to go to waste. If my cheeks weren't blushing yet, they were then. With a swift action, he picked up the stallion with his magic, and slid him down his throat. Before I could even tell what was going on, the pony was halfway down Fancy Pants's throat. I was in awe to say the least. The grace with which that pony's hips slid down into the depths of his maw...absolutely captivating.
"It unfortunately only lasted a few moments. Before I could start to enjoy the sight, the stallion's hooves were already sinking past Fancy Pants's lips and disappearing. I still remember the shape of the huge bulge coming out of his neck.~
"I snapped out of my daze before anypony saw, and composed myself once more. He offered his hoof and said that he'd like to go to the theater instead, to which I eagerly accepted. He headed for the door to grab his coat, and I back to the table to grab my giant hat. From there, I could really see his form. It's strange, the other pony hardly made a dent in Fancy Pants's midsection. I figured it was because he was such a large stallion, unlike the feminine colts that run all around Ponyville claiming they are, oh, what did they call it, 'Man enough.'
"Anyway, we spent the rest of the evening watching Ring Kitchard the Thrid by Malliwi Rapesheake, and after that I came home. Yes, it was a lovely evening indeed...Sweetiebelle? Where are you?"
Latter, we find Sweetiebelle on the battlefield with her fellow warriors, Applebloom and Scootaloo. They were discussing the Empress's condition.
"And she just kept going on about 'He was so delicious' and 'I just wanted to gobble him up,' I'm scared you guys."
Applebloom and Scootaloo exchanged looks. "Sweetie, ya'll not gunna like what Ah'm about t' say."
Applebloom explained that her sister,and whatever Rainbow is to Scootaloo, are also voraphiles. In fact the entire town is. You'd be hard pressed to find one who wasn't.
"So...so you're saying that we're the weird ones for not liking that creepy stuff?!" Sweetiebelle asked. Scootaloo coughed uneasily. "...what? You're not about to say that...that..."
Applebloom put a hoof on Sweetiebelle's shoulder. "It's ok, Sweets, we'll fix this condition of yer's."
Sweetiebelle shouts into the sky, hoof raised, naught but one syllable...No.
Fades to black.
Posted by Putinforgod 11 years ago Report
Poor Sweetie Belle, she's always the voice of the reason when everyone else is going nuts.
Great job as always, I've been grinning the entire fic.
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Unfortunately, she's also the ears of reason, and she goes nuts because if it.
"Grinning the entire time..."
...you can't tell by my cold hearted text representation, but I have that excited idiot grin you get when you're 10 years old and you're told that candie exists in the room. Man, usually no body says whether I suck or not nowadays. It's refreshing, ya know?
Also, my cheeks hurt.
Posted by Putinforgod 11 years ago Report
I understand. I think you should try to post your stories other sites like FA or even FimFiction as well.
Just try to expand your work in the Internet and maybe you will find out that the people who could like your stories are in there and not here.
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
That's...not a half bad idea. I think I've been neglecting going to other sites because I figure that most of the mlp vore community is on Eka's...
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
good storie well told shock ending was funny my only complant I HATE MALE PREDS. so no fave...
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Aw, Dragon, you spoil sport. (heh, jk)
Wait, well told? Tell me more, sir.
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
It stayed in charicter with how raity acted but again - 10 dkp form male pred... and sweety belle's response to the fact ponyville is voreville was funny tho it should not be sarpriseing given they live next to ever fucking free farest imean theres a town of ponys in there that turn to zombies at night and another that of moster of some kind pluse the gate to tarterus giant spiders trols mantacors cokatries and Luna know what else. The fact that Zacroa lives in it and Fluttershy on the edge of it makes me wounder how badass those two realy are when pushed to far. Its always the quite ones.... And dont forget alot of people belive that all cloudsdale pegesasi got through mandatory guard training and servas so that could mean at lest RD and Shy are trained fighters.
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Well, head cannons aside, Sweetiebelle is clearly insane. I mean, the poor girl thinks she's an Ultra Marine! She's clearly a Blood Raven, she should know that!
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
Sweetbelle a blood ravan? no no no shes clearly the scthes of the emporer type of pony id say nice black with gold to bring out her eyes. Appelbloom id see her in omega marines colors(second fonding spawned of the ultra marines capter.) And Scootaloo is strait up white scars.
That reminds me i saw a HOT pic of Twilight as a chaos soceress and Rarity as a noise marine caption.... That seems to fit them so well... fyi it was anthro ponies.
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Well, whatever they are, they'd probably be scouts, what with the lack of training and lithe bodies.
How can you have Space Marine ponies without turning them anthro?
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
Trust me you can ponyhammer on deviantart theres a pic of applejack nonanthro in termanter armor with a heavy-flamer... she looked scaryer then 3 squads of fully loaded ultra marine termanters with ultma pattern land raiders baking them up...
lol found the pic from befor http://furry.booru.org/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=272832
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
lol got the pages mixed up switch numbers at the end to 255527 sorry the one above post to a anthro photo finsh lol
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Applejack did look pretty sweet in that armor. I guess if you fudge the armor a bit, you can get it to fit them.
Also, that pic is a bit intense (what with the sacks on their chests, honestly, if they were dressed in tough leather and tight buckles, it'd still be pretty hot...imho) nice find.
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
lol yeah and fyi they all have fighting game polatys/match ups.
Ie applejack remnds me of chun-li (street fighter) rarity of ivy (soulcalibur) pinki is dead pool twilight well i see her with a scyth even more now she has wings rainbow just crys out twin swords and fluttershy well its always the quiet ones you have to watch...
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
I dunno, I see them more likely in a team based game like L4D...and only four would use guns, so it works perfectly.
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
Lol tecnicly there a rpg party and was going by there persenalty pluse how theyed look humanised or anthroised
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Well, I suppose that, since they are in a more social show, they would have more rpg aspects.
Well, then in that case, only three characters would have fighting roles. The other three would be fun NPCs.
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
no most rpgs have 3 to 5 team matets on the field at a time with difrent powers/weapons Legend of Dragoon for exsample was 3 in battle out of a cast of 7. MS saga a new dawn had 9 or 10 party mebers but only 6 in team 3 in battle. As to main six weapons. twi magic and a sycth, AJ kung-fu and maybe a heavy axe or mace, Dashie is ether a lancer/spearmare or twin swords with wing blads added to ether set, Rarity is magic (earth element) and a wipsword or nine section wip, pinkie is well pinke+guns, and shy would be heavy armor with shield claws... maybe some heals to....
I so did not give this WAY to mach thoght.
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
I'm sure there's a perfect set for these character types (even if they wouldn't even follow it because of the % chance they'll want to be that other class). I just don't see Rarity and Fluttershy fighting if they can help it.
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
Thats why shys weapon is shield claws shes a counter atack set as the fight goes on she gets madder till rage over drive kicks in and she goes everfree witch on on the bad guys. And rarity is usly one of the frist to resort to vilonenc rember the mantacore 3 attacker rarity shes also a bit of a thife...
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Well, I could also see Flutters being a thief character as well. She doesn't have physical strength or good speed, but she's probably lighter on her hooves than anypony else.
Rarity would have to be a cleric/bard. I don't care if Pinkie's the song singer, Rarity has the actual char on that team.
Posted by Dragonjaj 11 years ago Report
No shys a healer type lol one story on fimfiction.net called forgeworld has the mane 6 playing a pony vertion of dnd steampunk. and flutter shy is a necromacer cleaic thats the grups healer and eats the souls of those she kills to grow stronger.... lol not jokeing and she chose that class. we can talk mor in pm
Posted by juicefox 11 years ago Report
Wow, this is actually really good. I've read some of your stories before and, to be honest, I haven't really liked them. You usually seem to be taking the piss when writing and the storytelling ends up being inconsistent and frustrating to read as a result (at least to me). In this story, however, you kept the style consistent and made no fourth wall breaking references so I could actually appreciate the story you well telling. And it was a very good story at that.
I'm sorry if what I have said sounds harsh, but this is just such a drastic improvement. I just really liked this story.
Posted by 48th agent 11 years ago Report
Don't be sorry, this is the best feedback I've recieved in a long time. I know I shouldn't be doing stupid fourth wall jokes if I want a serious story, but I haven't been too comfortable writing serious stories in fear of failing to get the major ideas across.
But, if this is an example of what I've done right, then I'll...well, write more like it. Well, not more POV stories per say, but I'll definately take something away from this.
Oh, and thanks, I really needed that.