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Amalia's not the type of person one would normally consider a predator, but that doesn't mean she doesn't want to eat anyone. Like the cute Tarutaru living next door, for example. Thankfully, she's found someone to teach her - Selma, mistress of seduction.
Of course, there's a catch. If at any point Amalia falls prey to her teacher's seductions, she'll end up a snack herself...
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This one's been kicking around for a while (according to Docs, the first revision was the night of June 6th), but I had been putting off finishing/posting it because I couldn't seem to get Selma right. I still don't think I did, as I am not a mistress of making people want to feed themselves to me. (That also wouldn't work very well here in the real world.) Regardless, it's done now, and I can move on to other stuff.
I tried to experiment with a more direct description of Selma here, rather than dancing around the issue as I usually do.
Posted by Aickavon12 11 years ago Report
Hot dayum... can I slide down her throat yet?
At any rate, I think you did a good job at a 'loving dom' view of Selma. I don't know how she was supposed to be imaged as but she diffenetally came out as a loveable character for what it's worth. Though her dialog seems to be well, a bit short XD but I guess that's just me wanting to see moar!
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Posted by DeliciousReya 11 years ago Report
Selma: *purrs* That can easily be arranged, if you're so eager...
That seems about right :D Glad it came across well, then! And yeah, I think this story could have used some moar, but I wasn't confident enough in my ability to channel her and felt the best service I could do her was not mess up her character for too long. :( Oh well, next time! :D
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Posted by Aickavon12 11 years ago Report
yay next time, I eagerly await :D
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Posted by BardicLasher 11 years ago Report
Direct description worked very, very well.
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Posted by DeliciousReya 11 years ago Report
Phew :D Very glad to hear that! Description is still very difficult for me, but this story seemed to have a grand opening for it.
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Posted by Bright 11 years ago Report
Ooh, interesting story.
For a moment there I thought Amalia might be the predator in a sudden moment of the student becoming the teacher.
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Posted by DeliciousReya 11 years ago Report
That would have been fun, right? Sadly, Selma would not be denied, although that would be fun to see :D
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Posted by BardicLasher 11 years ago Report
Maybe an idea for a future story?
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Posted by DeliciousReya 10 years ago Report
I'll put it on the list :D *tacks*
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